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I really like this story, but omg reading this hurts me. The grammar is so bad I can barely understand some parts and it is almost impossible to understand some events with jumping around in time with no connection or proper explanation between them. I just want to be able to enjoy this story but damn those the writing quality make it hard.
Bruh there’s missing commas and an extra apostrophe but it’s clearly understandable you’re tripping if you’re giving this 2 stars for just the grammar cause it’s clearly better than a lot of stuff on here
He did use the ability to process lots of information to learn an entire topic in seconds but the problem is that using that led to him forgetting it very quickly after. Stuff he learned for stored in his short term memory and couldn’t get integrated to his long term knowledge. He forgot it in minutes after learning it with superspeed.
It’s good please keep suing it. I like that I can tell the difference with it
I really enjoy this story. I really like the focus on small details which is rare in most fanfics and I feel like it really adds to the experience. The main character’s personality is very interesting to say the least(he’s kinda crazy), but it makes it fun. Sadly I have a few problems with the MC he’s got a grimoire and just forgot to use it, or how he’s been putting off just delivering a letter when it wouldn’t take much to do it fast and avoid syr, and just our lack of information about him, which is fine because I think it’ll get developed later in the story but for now… yeah. Other than that I just want more chapters.
On one side I really like seeing side characters get development and small breaks in the main story seeing one of my favorite stories get updated just to see it’s not an actual chapter always hurts my soul. But if you get inspiration for one probably go for it, shouldn’t force yourself fro write the main story when you have an idea for a fun side chapter
Maybe if he falls in love with freya it’ll change to be more similar to liaris freeze where the more she loves him or he wants to get to her the faster he’ll grow? It could work well considering he’d have to beat the freya familia up to get to her and they’re the strongest
My guy so blind he calls a fight and chase sequence “nothing”. Besides sometimes stories take a bit of time to start up. I’m assuming you’ve never read a story before so you probably don’t know but there is something at the beginning of the story called exposition, where the world and characters are set up.