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Es una buena idea lo de las subtramas, pero creo que esta mal implementada, al menos yo me quede con las ganas de leer el reencuentro de luis y paranoia y que te den dos capítulos sin que pase nada relevante como que corta la cosa, pero si es buena idea
It is Interesting to know what other people think of the mc, although I think it is better that you only do it with friends or waifus, like this one with Bobby, Charles, Logan, Jean, Ororo, Emma, and not with enemies, I have read several fics that have a point of view like this and it becomes repetitive
what despair does to people, if he had thought intelligently and had gathered the girls none of this would have happened to him, it makes me sad because of how much I screw up but reap what you sow, since dxd where he committed suicide that many times I thought it was not going to end well, but not so bad
Eres un buen escritor y si te quieres desahogar en un cap del fic, hazlo, has hecho muy buenos capitulos, que uno no sea perfecto esta bien, y con todo y eso lo hiciste de una forma que comenzo otra trama con eso de los usuarios de sistema asi que 🤙🤙
what group are you talking about? if most of the terrorist groups in marvel are anti mutants, hydra and the hand are the only ones he could use to attack him and one has already failed and hydra is more of a rumor at the moment, he gains more with her as a reluctant ally than by killing her,
Is the story harem-like? or polyamory? or only wed is the pairing? I don't know, it gave me a lot of vibes of a threesome between wed, vlad and enid, as enid said if she hadn't liked vlad seducing enid she's going to say it, the fact that she didn't say anything is a clue, or maybe I'm making it up myself a story
I think the fluff chapter is not necessary, you have already done many, you should already conquer Jen, Jessica, Felicia and Silver, give them the serums, tell Gwen about the harem, get better, you said it yourself the cliché of stealing from Oscorp In spiderman fanfics, it works because it's something logical to do, no matter how cliché it may be, I think that after the invasion you should put in a few chapters of fluff with all its girls, but now you have to take advantage of the impulse that you gave to your Peter with the kidnapping of yuri and make it more proactive
I may be overthinking the character of Enrique but I don't think he will do anything to the academy, because he is trying to form the image of the benevolent hero and attacking an academy loses his image that he built so much, but if he is going to say that Emma is a mutant As I said, maybe I am overthinking Enrique and he is not very interested in his hero character
I think you got the idea but I don't know if it was a good thing that Peter forgot about Cletus, if he doesn't know about him, (carnage-cletus) with his meta knowledge, then it's okay that he forgot about him and see another rapist, Although since that violation did occur, I think that he had to follow up on that case, this is already his own opinion, but it is also another good point for you because it was good that you presented minor threats, you should do more caps like this (fights) there are many villains and villains to increase their power and harem, you've always placed a lot of emphasis on everything abstract about the superior gods and all that, and although it's fine, we all know that it takes a long time for that to take consistency, so it's good that do this kind of thing, and yes, I know that you are using the ucm mostly but you should also add to the x men, there is an opportunity for good fights and good women to conquer
spiderman has always been weaker than the symbiotes at least physically, he has been able to beat them because their weaknesses are very exploitable such as fire and sound, but physically they are stronger
I think you are going down in the ranking because you have not done anything in history, no offense, but there are already 70 or so caps and you only have gwen, yuri and may, you left the conquest of silver halfway, you have not fought important, you have not made important conquests, it is just that you are starting with felicia, at the beginning it seemed that you had good ideas, and that you could innovate the stories in webnovel a little but it has already become repetitive and boring, hopefully you can improve and save history