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  • JayJay_3591
    JayJay_35913yr
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    This story is amazing so far. although there are a few spelling and germatical errors here and there, The writing stile is uneque. I love the charicers and their personalitys as well (sorry if their are spelling errors in this)

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    Dragon Assassins
    Fantasy · N1ght_is_forever
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  • JayJay_3591
    JayJay_35913yr
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    Instead of wasn’t, I believe You mean weren’t. This story is amazing so far, keep it Up

    "The hell was that? What did I provoke? WHY DID I PICK THIS BOUNTY?" the sniper thought, their hands slick from sweat. Hope was still trying to distract them from targeting me when she noticed they wasn't moving.
    altalt
    Dragon Assassins
    Fantasy · N1ght_is_forever
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  • JayJay_3591
    JayJay_35913yr
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    I would re-phrase the sentence "My dream was the same nightmare." instead, go for something more like, tonight was the same routine, same nightmare, or, tonight I had the same nightmare. other than that I love the story so far. Keep up the good work

    My dream was the same nightmare. A cage was around me, one I couldn't escape from. It was dark, and smelled of the dead. Suddenly, out of the darkness came a river of needles. Poking and prodding, stabbing me through old marks and new spots. All I could do was scream in agony and pain. But just before I pass out in the dream, I would see Rose, my only friend, get crushed by a hammer, left for dead.
    altalt
    Dragon Assassins
    Fantasy · N1ght_is_forever
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