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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager11mth
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    Sword God in a World of Magic
    Fantasy · Warmaisach
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager11mth
    Replied to Adamo_Amet

    I can't wait :)

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    Murim: Struggle of the Weak
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager11mth
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    is this inspired by Chronicles Of Heavenly Demon?

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    Murim: Struggle of the Weak
    Eastern · Adamo_Amet
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager11mth
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    Give the mc more depth, one of the biggest flaws in reaper of the drifting moon was the depth of the main character and those around him. All the characters felt rather 1 dimensional, try to give your side characters real emotion. You could give characters real emotion in many manners one of these could be switching the pov to a side character, this more deeply expresses their feelings towards the events that are happening in the book. Another thing you could do is give the world a solid background and make it feel alive. For example, a lot of books make the world seem like it conveniently "appeared" for the main character give the world depth through immersive descriptions and intriguing history. To make the book feel more alive you could describe important changes in the world that don't revolve around the main character. Don't make the main character the world make the main character be in the world. You should also give the main character real struggle, yes in reaper of the drifting moon the main character struggles but to me when the main character overcomes this struggle, I don't feel relief or happiness for the character as all battles are very predictable. To create real struggle make the character loose. This makes the story more unpredictable, if the main character always wins battles with relative ease the wins don't feel satisfying. (Personal opinion)

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    Murim: Struggle of the Weak
    Eastern · Adamo_Amet
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager11mth
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    I hope this turns out to be as good or even better than reaper of the drifting moon, the way that you describe the main characters emotion and disposition gives me hope.

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    Murim: Struggle of the Weak
    Eastern · Adamo_Amet
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager11mth
    Commented

    This has to be inspired by reaper of the drifting moon, the exact same thing happened but with a snake instead.

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    Murim: Struggle of the Weak
    Eastern · Adamo_Amet
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager11mth
    Commented

    Is this prison inspired by the start of the book Reaper Of The Drifting Moon?

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    Murim: Struggle of the Weak
    Eastern · Adamo_Amet
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager11mth
    Commented

    ruh roh

    Hero chuckled and suddenly pierced him with a stare. Somehow, he didn't look so sick anymore.
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    Shadow Slave
    Fantasy · Guiltythree
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Posted

    As of the time I am making this review ( 5/19/2023) i have finished 278 chapters, and all I can say is that I am amazed by this authors genius. For the review I will split it into 5 sections Writing Quality, Stability of Updates, Story Development, Character Design. Writing Quality: 5/5 The writing quality is superb, The language and depictions on environments emotion and everything in-between thoroughly immerses the reader into the characters. Stability of updates: 5/5 as of 5/19/2023 the author updates the the story with a chapter everyday sometimes even multiple. Story Development: 5/5 The story development is phenomenal. It evolves throughout the entire story leaving the reader eagerly waiting for the next development. The author expertly weaves the story through the characters and unlike many other authors makes the story feel alive and connected. Character Design: 5/5 The character Design is the best part of the book the author not only explores the emotion and depth of the main character but others as well. Not only that but the character development of the main character is the best I have ever seen on webnovel, The main character goes through many struggles evolving his perspective on himself, the world and others. If you are looking for a purely evil main character this story is not for you. The main character is more than a villain. He is a human, he evolves and changes and although at some points he is villainous that is not all he is. World Background: 4/5 Although the World background is the worst part of the 4 other points of review it is still fairly good. The author does go into detail about the background of the world but in the grand scheme of the story I feel as though it's not enough. (spoilers ahead) The dimension's that the main character goes to don't have that much substance, you cant really feel the background that these dimension's have affecting the story in any tangible manner and you don't really feel engaged in what happens to the dimensions, For example the main character goes to a realm which is massive, thousands of kingdoms within a single empire, the leader of each kingdom being stronger than the main character. what's unfortunate is that you never really feel engaged with the empire/kingdoms. making them feel rather 1 dimensional. You really feel this 1 dimensionality when some kingdoms to war and you don't really care or feel intrigued about the outcome of the world. That being said I don't really think it dragged the story down that much because the story is more focused of the development of the main character and those around him. --------------------------------------------------------------------------- Perhaps my thoughts on this book will worsen but so far this is one of if not the best stories on webnovel, would definitely recommend.

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    Desolate Fate
    Fantasy · SpicyDaoist
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Commented

    :(

    Silence encompassed the room. Shi continued to stare at Yaan with a stunned expression, but Yaan ignored her, watching as Flora finally took her last breath. He stepped forwards and gently pulled the bedsheets over her body. He took a final look at her with a long, pained sigh, before he walked outside, then looked up into the sky.
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    Desolate Fate
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    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Commented
    Yaan watched with a blank expression as his mother, sister and aunt, were pierced through their chests by the sword. The blade stabbed straight through their bodies, cutting through them like a knife through butter. With each impalement, blood spurted out around their bodies, some of which was left behind on the flying blade.
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    Desolate Fate
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Commented
    The couple was overjoyed at the arrival of their first child, to the world it may look like an abomination but to them, he looked like a gift from God – precious, shining, a true miracle. They named Ciaran, in honor of his Grandmother Ciera, who unfortunately was not present for the birth of her grandson.
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    The Scourge: A Young Boy's Journey into Magic
    Fantasy · Lex_Lorger
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    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Commented
    Jeanne lowered her head and weakly called out "No father.... Hail Hydra."
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    MCU: Skull and Bones
    Movies · Swarthy
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Replied to asaade

    You mother currently regards you as a useless, waste of space everyday your dad wishes he put on a condom

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    Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
    Anime & Comics · FictionOnlyReader
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Replied to asaade

    I swear every time I see your brainless replies I pity your family more and more

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    Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Replied to asaade

    honestly I'm surprised a bot has responded so much

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    Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
    Anime & Comics · FictionOnlyReader
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Replied to asaade

    Funny coming from someone who does not have the patience to read past chapter 20. The fact that you have 0 patience 0 discipline and 0 braincells shows in the fact how you cant even understand the words in the novel the reason he passed out is because he had the incorrect thought that he had no chakra and lets be honest, you cant survive in naruto without chakra unless you're crazy talented.

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    Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Replied to asaade

    My taste is trash? You like harem books with main characters that are op from the start. You have the patience of a child and the taste of a brainless idiot who thinks good story telling is a main charecter blazing everyone from chapter 1. You need to see a surgeon so they can remove the black mold that is growing in your brain.

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    Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
    Anime & Comics · FictionOnlyReader
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Replied to asaade

    You are spamming 1 star reviews which is much more damaging to the book I am simply counteracting your idiocy by imputing the proper rating the book deserves because unlike you I have something called "Good taste"

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    Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
    Anime & Comics · FictionOnlyReader
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  • Lonesome_Voyager
    Lonesome_Voyager1yr
    Replied to asaade

    aren’t you a bot you spammed 1 star review’s without reading past chapter 20 -20 iq

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    Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve
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