daylightmoon123445

Nice story! Its pretty interesting, im kind of rooting for arya and our mc’s relationship . Love systie’s character as well, how shes scared of rats makes it funny lol, that cat is funny lol Look forward to reading more chapters!

The synopsis was catchy and attractive, and the cover was all new york times bestseller worthy 🤗 the story focuses on the sister's bond but the tension that grows with one of the sister's connection with the second character leo. The characters feel real, like blue period 💙 the writer does not shy away from exploring different aspects of the story. It is an exceptional story with an amazing plotline. Totally recommend and kudos to the author!

Very interesting story, I thought the synopsis/blurb could've been crafted better. The story overall was very good, I haven't read a lot of sword wielder stories so when I read this it was really interesting and to the point. Although the pace was a little fast, I think for someone reading webnovel it will catch their attention quickly. The paragraphs are not spaced well enough in my opinion, some are too long and they strained my eyes. Perhaps you can look into that in future chapters. Speaking of which, the paywall was a little too quick. I wouldn't recommend paywalling it that much unless you plan to write less than a hundred chapters. The writing was good, but sometimes the narrative slipped, like switching from the third-person perspective to the writer's/narrator's. There were no grammar or punctuation mistakes so far, but the use of passive voice was overrated, it got annoying to keep reading them. Perhaps balance them, but otherwise. I can't comment on the worldbuilding yet, but so far, so good. Avoid the info-dumping though, it won't help with a smooth narrative. The characters, Keven and Greg maybe, they sound and feel 2d, not real human. But maybe that was the author's intention to develop them further. the updates seem to be frequent and the development of the story is good enough, so I would say this deserves a 4/5 stars. Kudos to the author and happy reading!

The bluntness, did Greg by any chance know Keven's father before hand?

hah look how he started and where he is now. Nice chapter [img=recommend]

alright, i sent you a request

Well, as long as they are not full of hate, I'll take anything that comes my way :)

That's fine [img=faceslap], mine is a little inspired by the netflix series "locked and key", super amazing series, I hoped I could get to write about it more, and voila!

lol, looks like evil wins the sigma in this one ;) don't worry tho, you will be asked for feedback, and the sigma can come out for foraging for good plot points.

that's kinda useful ngl. Alright thx. Also, there is some talk that my novel might be made into a comic. Maybe, we will be lucky to see simp Trish in his og simp form lol