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ZeroSerei

ZeroSerei

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2021-03-09 JoinedPhilippines
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Replied to Wateristubeg

    Thanks

    Ch 1 Prologue: In The Beginning
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    The Epic Of Fire: A Battle of Beliefs
    Fantasy · SereiZero
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    First chap is a bit confusing with the narration, but it's pretty good apart from those issues

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    The Crystals
    Fantasy · PrinceofLightning
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    Furara, there is a time to do free hand and a time to use a staff to obliterate a demon general. Trust Hanjiro for once

    “ No! I don’t want to abandon my freehand magic to staff just because of this.”
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    Here I Am In This RPG World
    Eastern Fantasy · Haroldtigre
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    let me hand you a power stone

    Ch -1 Prologue: Looks like I got Scammed?
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    My Organic Life Experience of Living with a Plant Girl
    Fantasy · Dualpen
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    How did you do the italics

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    My Organic Life Experience of Living with a Plant Girl
    Fantasy · Dualpen
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    Furara is adorable AAAAAAAA

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    Here I Am In This RPG World
    Eastern Fantasy · Haroldtigre
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    "Yeah I'm hungry, what are we having for lunch?" Answer: You Two

    You two…..
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    Here I Am In This RPG World
    Eastern Fantasy · Haroldtigre
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    Need more of Furara, especially her breaking out of those robes.

    Ch 3 Save Log 2: A Cat Shall Stalk Me For Nothing
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    Here I Am In This RPG World
    Eastern Fantasy · Haroldtigre
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    I would prefer if you added spaces in between dialogue for easier reading but all in all, this is pretty decent man!

    Ch 2 First Day
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    Just happened
    Contemporary Romance · Zenande
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Replied to Rayene_Blue

    it isn't a grammar error, don't worry! it's something wrong with my head for even imagining it given the context

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    Entangled : The Heart Of A Warrior
    Contemporary Romance · Rayene_Blue
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    Either this sounds wrong or I'm just really really messed up

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    Entangled : The Heart Of A Warrior
    Contemporary Romance · Rayene_Blue
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    I will attempt to be the first comment in this chapter because I can : ) also, I think this chapter is great! I can see why those reads poured thanks to all that quality

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    Entangled : The Heart Of A Warrior
    Contemporary Romance · Rayene_Blue
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Replied to Ferjenni

    Anytime madame, was a good read after all and it deserves praise :)

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    Remember 1999
    Contemporary Romance · Ferjenni
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Posted

    Funny, lighthearted, and enjoyable. Man this book hits different, but to be honest it has a lot of things it has to improve on like its grammar and the way it presents itself. The narration itself and the way the narrative is presented was good with the switching perspectives, but I don't think replaying the same scene serves the purpose that well... not like I could say much about that in my book, but all in all this has been a pretty stellar experience

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    THE SECRETARY
    Contemporary Romance · Precious_Onwe
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    who killed Tyre?? wait who was Tyre?????

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    THE SECRETARY
    Contemporary Romance · Precious_Onwe
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    I love how she fails to insult mid-sentence

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    THE SECRETARY
    Contemporary Romance · Precious_Onwe
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    this could have been shown through their rooms, but I guess this does serve it's purpose

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    THE SECRETARY
    Contemporary Romance · Precious_Onwe
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Posted

    I will be direct to the point here... I see the effort, but readers, where were you? Seriously though, this book deserves way more reads than it should have. It's light, crisp, and good. While it isn't quite original as other concepts or aspects, the way it is presented, the manner of characters bouncing off each other is just a nice taste. This thing is the Pringles of story writing so where you guys at?

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    Remember 1999
    Contemporary Romance · Ferjenni
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    slick, real slick here

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    Remember 1999
    Contemporary Romance · Ferjenni
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  • ZeroSerei
    ZeroSerei1yr
    Commented

    Jin Ae sounds like a person I'm gonna like for real. this made me wonder if I would've been more like the male lead had I taken psychology instead

    Ch 1 Chapter 1 - Forgotten
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    Remember 1999
    Contemporary Romance · Ferjenni
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