First chap is a bit confusing with the narration, but it's pretty good apart from those issues
Furara, there is a time to do free hand and a time to use a staff to obliterate a demon general. Trust Hanjiro for once
How did you do the italics
Furara is adorable AAAAAAAA
"Yeah I'm hungry, what are we having for lunch?" Answer: You Two
it isn't a grammar error, don't worry! it's something wrong with my head for even imagining it given the context
Either this sounds wrong or I'm just really really messed up
Funny, lighthearted, and enjoyable. Man this book hits different, but to be honest it has a lot of things it has to improve on like its grammar and the way it presents itself. The narration itself and the way the narrative is presented was good with the switching perspectives, but I don't think replaying the same scene serves the purpose that well... not like I could say much about that in my book, but all in all this has been a pretty stellar experience
who killed Tyre?? wait who was Tyre?????
I love how she fails to insult mid-sentence
this could have been shown through their rooms, but I guess this does serve it's purpose
I will be direct to the point here... I see the effort, but readers, where were you? Seriously though, this book deserves way more reads than it should have. It's light, crisp, and good. While it isn't quite original as other concepts or aspects, the way it is presented, the manner of characters bouncing off each other is just a nice taste. This thing is the Pringles of story writing so where you guys at?
slick, real slick here