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Daniel_Magaya_15461mthCommentedhmmm he's being extreme tho, depends on the protags
The villains were upright and spoke nicely. They were unlike those protagonists, who wanted to kill everyone.- Daniel_Magaya_15462yrCommented
You've broken a usual trope by showing us the mc and his girl already having strong feelings and understanding of each other on the onset of the book which I like... hopefully you don't pull some depressing stuff out the bag..please i beggeth thee
Ch 12 Chapter 12: The beginning of The End - Daniel_Magaya_15462yrCommentedCh 8 Chapter 8: Fallen
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Ideed the smoke must be had
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- Daniel_Magaya_15462yrCommentedCh 4 Chapter 4: Lover Boy
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hahahahaha should have made a mugabe remark...classic
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winter huh...interesting
"You did good my Winter-Solstice. I didn't think you'd get that good so fast." I say to Carol as I take her into a deep kiss. - Daniel_Magaya_15462yrCommented
Brandon? Thompson? interesting
My senses grow sharper, I can hear a bird landing on a tree branch hundreds of metres away from me. I can see Brandon's blood circulation, his pulse. I can smell what Thompson had for lunch earlier and honestly, it's all a bit too much and too fast. I throw up violently on Brandon's shoes and that's when things get physical - Daniel_Magaya_15462yrCommented
the bullies tho , you can't have a story without em
"Hey Santiago, be seeing you after school, don't forget our little play date," Brandon whispers from behind Carol. He's the school's rugby captain and he's been on my case since the first year of high-school. It's gotten worse ever since Carol and I started dating. I think he maybe liked her and it gets on his nerves every time he sees us together. I can never tell Carol, she'll blame herself and it isn't her fault. - Daniel_Magaya_15462yrCommented
the Denzel i believe its called lol
I open and my locker and immediately almost pass out by what I see. It's a Next Gen gamethread console with a Frenzy on top. Like a strawberry decorating an ice-cream sundae. It's a glorious sight. I'd drop a single tear if I could. - Daniel_Magaya_15462yrCommented
Didn't see him remembering the murders happening. broke the cliche quite well
Abruptly I wake from my bed and frantically look around my surprisingly clean room. Ugh, my head hurts. "How long have I been out?" I mutter to myself as the agonising headache subsides. I must've crawled in after... After I tore through those people. I wonder what happened after that. - Daniel_Magaya_15462yrReplied to ShinyFireET1
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The background of any good story is the character... I've given him a 5 because he's managed to make the character likeable as well as believable and give him a funny way of interacting with the reader especially when he mentions stuff like a horror movie cliché that we all find ridiculous.... keep writing my G....ganbare