That was a very neat chapter! Their language and grammar are amazing for their personality. Keep on writing!

The story line is a good set up for just two chapters so far! I like the genre of the book and the story board. I know its going to turn out great! Keep on writing I can't wait for the new chapter haha.

The story would be very good if maybe there was a list of names, and background stories to each person. Maybe even a prologue. But other than that you could already tell this is going to be great! I also think a descriptive setting would make a wonderful edition :)