Tommie_Wendall
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"Lover of Classic Cars and The Old West" tells my story. I mostly write classic westerns and experiment with a few other things. We'll see how well folks like my stuff here.
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Tommie_Wendall4 years agoPostedSome of the phrasing was extremely cheesy. The set-up regarding the gunfighter could've been more descriptive. Example: it's STATED twice that the gunfighter was the fastest in the West. Great! Every gunfighter is the fastest in the West. I know he can't be the slowest, but that is not interesting when put that way. The plot was good though. I definitely enjoyed that.
- Tommie_Wendall4 years agoCommented
Try livening this up with some active verbs and descriptive passages.