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dirt floor poor is a phrase I've never heard, and will be using from now on
ah HA! further confirming that Billy is a Bully, smh my head, if only we had seen it earlier
Great start man, loving the ideas. Im going to be honest with you, very hard to read. its just the language you are using and the switching of the tenses, I can't get into that flow of reading, its like hard cuts. I can see your trying to use more descriptive adjectives but some of them just block the flow yk. Try and write how you would speak and add whatever adjectives after, and then give it a read through to see how it sounds. Amazing work so far man, I know I don't have the patience to write and its actually amazing you got the willpower to do it man
Is this your cameo!
don't use a lot of to's in one go. It does make it a bit hard to read
yeah definitely some tense issues orange. you've put pleaded so it's past tense and therefore furrowing should be furrowed. An advice I got from writing stories was always to use past tense
maybe my English is off, but what are you trying to say here? that he doesn't come here often? it's weirdly phrased
Grim reaper Sunny, reporting for duty!
Mannn, “fairness is a human concept”- guilty That’s tombstone worthy right there👏
At times like these, I hate being a reader cause we can all se what’s gonna happen guys😭
This ain’t discord, how you still checking for your name🥹
Guiltyyyyyyyyy, AHHHHHHH
Such praise!… he wants something for sure, speakin from experience😌
God, I hate that I’ve read so many novels that I KNOW this is a death flag
I imagined him saying this in Beyoncé’s voice
Mann, it’s the second paragraph guilty🥹
I checked the replies to see if someone had made this exact joke, get back in the house, your stayin🤝
A worthy foe indeed
Ash you can't go down yet man, who's gonna be my guy if you're gone!
He's finally here, pleassssse let his aspect be about backstabbing