Okay so.. this novel is starting off great but there are some problems which i personally think you should fix 1st - the writing quality. dont get me wrong here, it is average or even above on this app but the dialogues are like they lack the “humanism”. when there is a dialogue, it feels like programmed robots talking. try to add more dots, !, ? and other things that would make the writing quality more readable and more comfortable to read 2nd - there are too little details - for an example, i totally have no ideo how the characters look, while some people like little details, you should still atleast try to explain how the main cast looks 3rd - fast pacing - again, some people will like this, some will not but the story we have now, feels a little too fast for me otherwise, this is a good novel that you can probably expect good things from in the future (i hope), so as of now, i reccomend it to read this, because the story is interesting enough and good luck to the author with this project[img=recommend]

I think it should be time to be more serious in the upcoming chapters, these jokes are getting annoying and repetitive, at the start it was funny yeah but i can read many fanfictions like this

Rimuru x Gazel?

I hope youre gonna use the black hole energy creator that was given to Berreta in the after stories for something. I think it couldve been a good idea to use it for someone, maybe even an OC

author has probably other way than the originak

btw if you wanna make rimuru a true demon lord, you should make him eat the orc lord the same way as the original bcs thats how he got the demon lord seed

you really love meat buns after all, mr author

when rimuru gettin some sword

thx

i think you should let rimuru eat shizu bcs rimuru with the body is hot🤤

For real, like bro. You’re a weak child compared to Izuna who was defeated, what you gonna do?