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Good chapter. Just get him a finance advisor or something or just invest it into bonds and a global EFTs. You could also have him buy physical assets. Would Kylie accept investment from Natan?
True. But at least you added the part to make it seem they are included in the story.
P.s: This is after the rework of the previous chapter: You can remove this small section. 👍
I really like this chapter it's much better than the previous version. The only thing I'd suggest is making sure everything still flows properly for new readers. There was one part where the American paparazzi questioned Kylie about Natan's injury, even though earlier she was shown watching the game. Just make sure the timeline and transitions are smooth so everything reads naturally.
Was pretty good. Just don't forget about the rest of the family (Her sisters and mother). It would be a good idea to have Natan meet them when they head back to America. Honestly you got a real good story here. Just got to balance the interactions with his personal life(Kylie, Kids, His family and Her family) and with work(Football, sponsorships, etc etc).
I think one is fine. As for Kylie, I'd like to see more of her and her family's thoughts and reactions. Maybe dedicate a couple of chapters to her? As for her business, is there any chance she could use Natan as a sponsor? 😂 Also, with it being the age of the internet, she could easily manage her company while in Europe and continue expanding it, only needing to take occasional trips back to America.