Toxi_Kitty_Shin

Ahh I know what you mean. It's just that it is getting quite boring seeing no evolution.

How long are ya make us wait for the next evolution? I mean that is the main attraction of the story and why Isn't he evolving yet.

Did you really copy Terminator. Mate seriously! 235684747473656485484958473847474747476847857757688994769796748485675757474767585968658586767757565767678998645899864678985688888

Looks interesting but too op to make a balance. Since he embodies the unknown that means he literally is everything that humans do not know like the universe.

One word your writing feels like a info dump more than a story.

Jujutsu is a japanese word. So the Chinese jujutsu sorcerer's should have a Chinese name.

I see okay. Good luck writing

Boring. I mean there's no reason for him to gain strength after beating dark souls since he'd be pretty strong. That's why choosing BNHA was a bad idea.

Mate do you realize that the level of lolicon your dropping to is horrifying. I mean she is just 5 year old she's a kid to be cuddled and hugged and cheeks pinched. A kid. I thought she was abt 12 or something but mate 5 SERIOUSLY. And why not wait till he reaches the school. Until than focus on the fire keeper. Just rewrite and change this. I mean it's literally child marriage. And for what reason do you need to have romance so fast?

Mate for what reason would you a person with common sense marry someone right if the bat. Although I didn't see you mention her age but she couldn't be that young and isn't Momo generally the smarter one so she should be well above average in her age group. And tell me how would someone who died 29 times already be capable of a harem? I mean he will die more and more. By going in those worlds he becomes the ashen one, the hunter, doom slayer now think how would you feel if any of them had a harem? Very out of character right. Well forget the harem part I am just reading cuz of the games nothing more. I mean you could make a greater story by removing romantic interests or lowering it to bare minimum and enable multiverse travel along with increasing the worlds he can interact with in his dreams like Dante's inferno. And my suggestion for relationship Rather than literally doing whatever the heck you did. Make them friends first slowly improve their relationship and somehow make her sympathize by revealing his quirk and develop their relation in a way where she tries to help him go through his troubles and fear and they get closer. Note: I am not good at romantic suggestion but the one I provided up there should be barely good enough. If you had asked any other issues I could provide some insight. And you do realize that any of the characters from the game would demolish BNHA. Like do you think anyone can compare to full powered Ashen one,. Hunter or the ridiculously strong doom slayer. Should have used a bigger playground aka World.