OcramVinicius
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thank you very much for yur review. This was my first ever novel, so I went for a safe option, and made generic system. I'm glad that you liked the characters! I've been trying to improve my writing skills, but I still make errors, or miss important information in the story; I expect to improve further as I write more novels.
let's go!!!!!!
my parents: phone traking. CIA parents: phone traking, body cameras, security cameras, hidden cameras, bugs everywhere, full background checks whenever I bring someone home. Theo's dad: [Absolute Senses] (I'm sorry for you, Theo; I wish you the best!)
Neban: Strong monters: Feel fear, you human!!! Neban: fear? what is that? wey & isona: (touch Neban) Neban: (breathing intensifies)
then there are the Legendary SSS+ level friends who do everything you need before you even know that you need it.
I think that he finds humans disgusting because we eat veggies... what else is there to hate about us? We're perfect... right?
I thought the same thing, lol
Many people are just criticizing your work... But I think that the author developent adds an extra later to the story development. When I read a story, I feel as if I'm inside the story, and if the writing is getting better, it also makes me feel as if I'm the one who's getting better. Anyway, I think that you did a great job! I wrote an online novel myself, and I only have a few short episodes for now; But now that I look back the the first episodes, I see that I've become way better than I was before, and I hope that you feel the same way!