Thank you for the feedback; honestly, I didn't notice it at first, but after re-reading the chapter, I also think that the way I portrayed Dawn is a bit lacking. So, I was thinking of doing a revision later (like always). See, as I was writing the chapter earlier, I wanted to make their interaction sweet and lovely, like how Blue Dragon did. However, I can't copy-paste the canon considering the difference in the timeline. Second, my writing style is just different. Anyway, as I was saying, I wanted to make their interaction sweet, pure, yada-yada, but at the same time, I wanted to keep it as natural as possible.

He would later, but I'm going to make it more complicated.

No NTR!

ah that's right. ty for reminders.

Harem is unrealistic... but dating two like the OG at the same time should be fine.

MC was much more mature than OG Ben, he knew that he couldn't change some characters, so he decided to move on and stop wasting time on them

No spoiler, but yep, no NTR.

Anyone who knows Ben's/ Nova's parents occupation? I'm writing my own Fanfic, and was too lazy and scared (if u know what I mean) to re-read the original..

Does he even have time to do it? I know that he only had to supervise most of his projects now, but even so, it took a lot of his time. Comics layout, animations, toys, and now there was an additional Newspaper (Calvin and Hobbes) etc., Let alone one, even dozen of managers can barely do it at all. And now you're telling me that a 10 year old, time traveling, super genius can managed it so simply that he still had enough time to become a voice actor? Perhaps, he can indeed managed it now, but what the future? How many episode are there in Dragon Ball? Do he have to dubbed them all? From the few hints of author, I can already see him entering various fields soon, The biggest question is, is that really possible? Also, can he even have a free time of his own?

Don't you think that the risk of the thing he plagiarised? I mean yes, I appreciate that he don't want to missed them! But the fact is, there are countless works out there that way better than 1985 works! The way the MC steal those creators works is okay, but the timeline should be 'when the creators have no idea about it at all!'! The way MC stole them, despite knowing that the author has already created layout or on the way creating it, was just disgusting. Actually, i don't care about it honestly, that was just my inner grumbling, i actually appreciate some part of it, cuz it also made the story more realistic and immersive. What really bothers me is the risks he taking when doing things, like how do you explain to those creators and those people that you didn't plagiarised? i mean you, ones or twice is okay, but when it always happen, people will eventually get suspicious you know? It was like from being cautious at the beginning and all of sudden, MC started acting recklessly.. its like a Cultivation Novels MC who was poor and down to earth at the beginning until chapter 200+, they becoming a face slapping genius wannabe.. know what i mean? Well, that' was just my initial impression anyway, there's still a lot of chap to read, so might as well finished it before making a judgement.

not gonna lie, the first name that comes up in my mind when i think of the chef is him HAA HA HA HA.

Thanks for reminder. I'm going to have him do it later, I just wanted him decide what build suit the most. .

I'm not going to make the MC very OP soon, I want him to experienced a lot of failure to build up his character. Yami yami no mi is indeed good, but i felt that 'Gamers' ability alone is already OP. Building a terrorist organization like Aizen, is cool, maybe ill do it later, but for now, i wont have him involved with any organizations yet.

Reading this feels like reading chinese cultivation novels. Everything can be solved by Killing. Not bad story though, it's just too bloody, and it's not cool.

Honestly, I dunno why people like White Beard's shock fruit, I mean yes It's OP but y'know, the only thing it do is destruction, compare to Paw Fruit application (Bartolomew Kuma's fruit) and Ope Open no MI's godly ability, it was far tasteless...

Why is he even saving them? Because he's a kurapika chuniboy?

Good story. The only thing is that I found MCs character annoying. Emo, and somewhat self deprecating, there's even a point that he began acting like 'I'm a psychopath' which is lame in my opinion. His name is Madara and throughout the entire show, I can see the shadow of 'him' but because of some unnecessary actions, it felt more like a failed copycat of Madara's character. He's boring and too dramatic.