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Jlionbad_93642mthPostedEven though this story has errant quote marks and missing punctuation, it is still a good read. I also noticed that from a certain point onward there is improper formatting concerning inner monologue, but I think this is more the fault of the software and not the author. I read all the free chapters and I find the story very enjoyable, I also liked how there was this aspect about one of the male main characters that was built up in the background and boy does it feel good to see it pay off.
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I guess Orion didn't read the one where Wolverine literally came back from the dead by regenerating from a single drop of blood.
"Rube, anyone and everybody is sure to die with those kinds of methods, not just us vampires…" Orion dryly stated while clicking his tongue and slowly shaking his head. "Even John Logan aka Wolverine of Marvel's X-Men would, bro." - Jlionbad_93643mthCommented
And entering houses without permission?
"In addition to being turned to dust by the sun, it removed our adverse reactions to running water, fire, silver and garlic." - Jlionbad_93643mthCommented
There is a missing 'be' here
"Hey Mother… Father… got a call from Big Brother yesterday night… And he's kind of wondering if he could tell you about that woman grandfather wanted you to find, Dad…" rehearses the youngest Sciarillo in front of her dressing room mirror while trying to gain enough courage to tell her stepfather what Marion had requested her to say. "Damn it, bro… why couldn't you brave enough to talk to Father about her. Okay, I realize it's Grandpa's last request on his deathbed and is connected to Dad's inheritance and all, but you are supposed to tell him your good news yourself, right?" - Jlionbad_93643mthCommented
this sentence is missing an end quote
The good-natured monarch picked up after the second ring, "Hey Reuben, I hope my requests are on their way. It's starting to get dark out here. I want us to be under the sheets by the time evening sets in. - Jlionbad_93643mthCommented
Thus the title of the book
This is the first time someone wants to take me ONLY when I'm having a period. And including the peak days, too. Bloodlust during the whole bloody time… Literally! - Jlionbad_93641yrPosted