HollyRisk

I also recognise my shortcoming for the translation, and I do have to admit that Swallowed Star is difficult to translate due to many different and meanings of pinyins. Which made me quite lazy later on 😅 (also my knowledge about the novel as well.) But I learned alot from my mistakes from this fanfiction. I hope my future translations doesn't have these mistakes and error 😊

it was my sister translation 😭🤣 but thank you for notifying me. Will fix it as soon as possible.

Novel is heavily written by AI (Or maybe author got inspired by AI writing/ideas). You can already tell by these random and weird ''em'' dashes in every chapter. some paragraphs are unnecessary long. As if the author want to make sure that readers get the idea/plan or what ever in the context (Written poorly as well). Now as for novel itself:- world building is kind of shit. But since im someone who have read dozens of fantasy books/comics, visualizing in my mind is easy. but still annoying. Author severely lacking in creativity which is... kind of obvious since he's using AI. MC is a money grubber and quite arrogant about the enhancement. He get scared easily against the strong type. (Like that tank guy). He doesn't hide anything, including the items he enhanced, his class and what he does. Which frustrated me a little. (MC is like an attention seeking type of person). And im surprised by the lack of villians. I assumed there would be someone taking advantage or scheming against him but there isn't. lack of emotions are around as well. I mean, there is some but some situations don't have that which forces me to turn on my imagination and guess how they feel. Because of the lengthy paragraphs, i had to skim read all that shit to see something worth to read, which made me bored easily. I've read up to chapter 22 but i had to drop it there. Didn't get any better and im not someone who is willing to lose brain cells while reading further, even if it gets better after 100 chapters. Good update stability from what i see but the writing quality is very poor unfortunately. (Or maybe it get's better later, but i had bad impression early chapters so my hopes are very low. I won't have any further expectations) The novel has potential, but author really need to get creative, fixing those lengthy paragraphs, increase writing quality, add more emotions for multiple views (example: khan is surprised/shocked/disblief etc.), describing people attitude more clearer and better, would make this novel passable to read. This is my personal and honest review. Other people will surely say something different. But this is how i viewed this novel (During my read up to chapter 22). Good luck author.

Is this supposed to mean something? I don't understand it.

okay what is going on here, this sounds very ai writing but at the same time, it isnt. lol. And again why are you combining 4-6 sentences in one? You could have written this way better.

Do you really have to smoosh all those words into one paragraph? some people would skim read all of this. Very meaningless.

please no...

you are the author of this fanfic? 🤔

thank you for the critical review.