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Great story plot so far! One small comment: there is a lot of small perspective correction that you have to think of; “he” and “she”. Since we are reading from her perspective this chapter it gets a bit confusing when there is a lot of mistakes like “he said” and “his dad is (….)” Other than that, you have a good writing style and the story has a lot of potential. Looking forward to seeing how this story will unfold :) I am rooting for you!
I would really like to see if Evie would get a relapse after her time in the basement. She was strong then en there because she felt she had to save them all. But after being drugd and abused... then saved. How will she be after the ordeal? Will she go back where she started or will she suffer quietly and alone while pretending everything is okey because she doesn’t want Sebastian to worry? Evie doesn’t see herself as a victim, but after living through her nightmare again... will her perspective change? If you feel like it and have time. It would be really cool to see sebastians perspective before he met Evie. To be more concrete, his involvement in Evies first kidnapping. How it all began.. just a thought :) I am not ready for their story to end. So I hope you find the inspiration to continue their adventures. And I hope you continue your writing. You are absolutely amazing at this and I’m looking forward to your future work(s) if there will be any! ❤️🙌🙌
I think your direction was a good thought. As you said, people can’t think clearly when drugged. so if Evie was to come up with a master plan, that would be humanly impossible (ish). By going in the direction you went for this chapter Evie seems more humane. We can emphasize with her. So god job! Looking forward to the next chapter 🙌🙌
I have been thinking for a while if one of the forensice team was the guy they was looking for. With the clues that has been given and so forth. But it is hard to say because we haven’t seen so much of them in the story. But from this chapter this guy seemed pretty suspicious with his reaction to the bag. 🤔🤯 I don’t know... but I am really looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks for the update!
God damn... I was speechless this whole chapter. Seriously you are one hell of an amazing author. So much attention to details and character developments. You keep us readers on our feets, and that is a good thing. We will never know for sure what to expect in this story and it’s amazing. I love the suspense we get by it. Looking forward to the next chapter! Amazing work as always 🙌🙌
I can really feel the suspense! Jesus this is getting exciting, I never thought Evie would meet Alice again. I wonder if Alice will get to know that Evie is there too, and how she will react when she does. Looking forward to the next chapter 🙌🙌