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suphowyoubeen18dCommentedreplace the second Panoti with him;*
Panoti who didn't know Panoti silently asked Adrian "Hey, who's he?"- suphowyoubeen18dCommented
That is how annoying*
Honestly if looks could kill, Aurora would be dead hundreds of times. That much annoying she was to everyone. - suphowyoubeen18dCommented
add a comma after Like feet* no s
Like first it stuck onto the feets of first middle aged man which would last for about two or three more hours. - suphowyoubeen18dCommented
As* if luck
Ad if luck wasn't on his side, he fell on his superior making his already loud cry even louder. - suphowyoubeen18dCommented
on* many shops
Aurora then began looking around and saw that the posters were pasted one many shops. Aside from that she also noticed one thing, the mood of everyone. - suphowyoubeen18dCommented
sighed*
Dustin nodded and threw the topic at the back of his head and looked at the dead bodies of the humans. He wanted to see if anyone was alive but sadly there wasn't so he signed and was going to look away when he heard Elora. - suphowyoubeen1mthCommented
not*
Aadi's mood turned sour as he said "Tch, what little girl, she's a devil, no even those devils will accept her as a goddess, you're the only one who can't see her true self." - suphowyoubeen1mthCommented
Mark*
Jev gestured to mark to leave as he said "You are free to attack if you want but we are just going to keep our asses here." - suphowyoubeen1mthCommented
your*
Aadi raised his eyebrows in surprise and said "It's really surprising for a Blazing Four horned bull to actually make a domain but sure, Let's see you domain." - suphowyoubeen1mthCommented
towards Aurora*
Kavel then turned towards as he said "As for whoever actually have the guts to use underhanded means in first selection will be punished so heavily that they will regret being born." - suphowyoubeen1mthCommented
laughed*
Aadi laghued and said "It'll be okay, this guy will be a stepping stone for my future disciples so he has a purpose so let him live, anyways let's go to our bookstore, I have to rest as the age is affecting me." - suphowyoubeen1mthCommented
Inhaled, would be a better word.
Aurora stood up as she looked outside the window, she breathed the fresh air even though it was afternoon. - suphowyoubeen1mthReplied to suphowyoubeen
Same with two and three. Capitalize them when you are talking about the characters.
Aurora continued her strike as she thrust the flaming daggers into one's ribs. This time one was prepared and he immediately took out his sword and parried the attack but due to the force behind Aurora's strike, he took three steps back and his sword also broke in two. - suphowyoubeen1mthCommented
capitalize one, since it refers to a person
Aurora continued her strike as she thrust the flaming daggers into one's ribs. This time one was prepared and he immediately took out his sword and parried the attack but due to the force behind Aurora's strike, he took three steps back and his sword also broke in two. - suphowyoubeen1mthCommented
need some work on this paragraph to make it more understandable.
Her grandfather nodded and said "It's good that way, she will survive in this world with that nature of her. With her being so looking careless everybody will let their guards down around her. You can make her your friend if you like, little Ana." - suphowyoubeen4mthCommentedCh 730 Divine Tree (1)
- suphowyoubeen7mthCommented
him*
This paragraph has been deleted. - suphowyoubeen8mthCommented
same for these lines
Her whisper of defeat barely escaped her lips. - suphowyoubeen8mthCommented
this is the second paragraph saying almost the same thing
For several more hours, they indulged in this connection before the spell faded due to exhaustion, causing Ceilia to return to her original form. - suphowyoubeen8mthCommented"Meooowwwww"