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It makes sense. I draw conclusions from the already shown transformations of bird zoans and the concept that the fruits of zoans precisely CHANGE a person into a beast (I will not talk about humanoid zoans since their hybrids are simply shown differently). I mean that human limbs do not disappear during transformation, but change into those of an animal (the tail is rather a special case). Take King for example, his arms become wings because the Pteranodon has no arms. Or one of the Gorosei turns into Itsumade, also replacing his arms with wings, so giving the phoenix both wings and arms in the hybrid breaks the final form of the phoenix (he might as well grow another pair of wings). I repeat, this is just my opinion and we can talk about devil fruits for a long time. This is your fanfic and the embodiment of your thoughts.
The dark MC in one piece is refreshing, I hope it stays that way (notes of black beard). Wings on the back may sound better, but it spoils the transformation of the zoan hybrid a little. Also if he has the power of fire MC could try to copy some of Ace's moves (from the Ace manga)
If I were Natasha, I would be wary of how hard they are trying to recruit her... Can you tell me again the reason for this recruitment? I mean, she may be an expert at espionage and assassination, but that's about it. The Foundation is full of professionals who already exist and which the Main character will receive.
Overall I like how everything is going, but there are 2 things that confuse me. 1) It seems to me that too often there are moments when girls blush, cry, feel safe next to him, how his smile easily wins hearts and so on. I can’t express it exactly, I forgot the word, but I hope you understand. 2) about the team. many people want people like Kaya and Mikita, and I can’t understand why they are chasing them so much? There is absolutely nothing special about them. Almost every girl from the grand line is superior to them in appearance (especially Kai), their characters are also annoying (I understand that this can be solved simply by a system and words: I love you.). if you need a doctor, just see Reiju. P.s. This is just my opinion and I don't want to offend anyone
Well, your story has potential and I hope you don’t abandon it (at least until the end of the war at the top). Also some words: 1) I don’t see the point in giving him a second df zoan, of course it will give him strength and endurance, but not much and for the most part it’s not as useful for logia as an interesting paramecia. 2) Waifus: I have no problems with Robin; Yamato is not sure because since you are going with Mugawara, she will appear closer to the end; I’m sorry that Nami is not there, she’s a beauty and it’s easier to “rewrite” her since she appears at the very beginning; then I'll be for Reiju or Uta. 3) I also hope you won’t give out strong enemies for the MC out of nowhere, because there will be almost no problems with logia in the first part of the grandline (Ace had almost no problems). that's all I wanted to say and I wish you to stay positive :D [Google translate]
It's interesting to see Benimaru in One Piece, his template is rarely used in fanfiction. However, what's the point in the first two chapters, if he forgot everything? I think it was easier to just make a character with Benny's appearance and give Mera Mera no mi, rather than making a meeting with Rob and adding people with similar fire powers.