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RoarWritings2yrReplied to kuhaku_soraYeah after reading the rest I already guessed so.
Code had holographic set wrapped around the head like a helmet. It allowed the players to transfer their thoughts inside the world filled with magic and monsters. People could become villains or heroes inside the world, and nobody could stop them, not even the game developers.- RoarWritings2yrPosted
Starting felt like the generic start of the VR story but as I progressed the story was quite unique. The thing that I felt unusual was the game dev not having any control over their own game. It felt kinda unreal but it was need for the plot trigger so I guess its fine. Ngl the writing quality was quite good. It was emerging and easy to imagine. I liked the writing style. the only thing I felt lacking was the character design. Its my opinion tho.
- RoarWritings2yrCommented
Wouldn't that break the balance of the game?
Code had holographic set wrapped around the head like a helmet. It allowed the players to transfer their thoughts inside the world filled with magic and monsters. People could become villains or heroes inside the world, and nobody could stop them, not even the game developers. - RoarWritings2yrReplied to MrChinchilaCh 2 Liuetenant!
- RoarWritings2yrReplied to MrChinchilaCh 1 A Second Chance
- RoarWritings2yrCommentedCh 2 Liuetenant!
- RoarWritings2yrCommentedCh 1 A Second Chance
- RoarWritings2yrPosted
The starting looks interesting and promising. But Xing being able to talk like a mature man from the birth even though he doesn't have any memory, It kinda feels weird to me. Nonetheless the story has potential. There are some grammatical and spelling mistakes. I hope writer will fix them and keep it in mind.
- RoarWritings2yrCommented
How did you actually write this? :/
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