I must say you write an incredible good Luna

And the harvesting of meat and things??

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No I was thinking why are you calling the indominous Rex (A raptor, T-Rex hybrid) as a T-Rex

I agree good start very organic did not fill forced in anyway, one of the only time were a god like being was reborn and it felt natural, no oh I just happened to have a muguffin that let me try again lucky me

Just keep writing like this and you will definitely meet expectations

This is really well researched and adapted can’t wait for more

To rushed

Be careful of your pronouns he = male she = female

Think this maybe one of your first time’s writing in English and you need to keep an eye on your sentence structure there are some redundant word/sentences and you are also missing out some word building aspects (just small things the MC points out that doesn’t get answered)

Loving the world building it all seems so fluid and natural

Context would help It’s like you skipped parts of the story How did Toby get here, why is he so strong and why the change of name Also where is here why is it important so many unanswered questions is like you expect us to read your mind and already know the answers

Continuity is trouble

Nope