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Clair Obscur: Expedition 33

Nice reference bro

I honestly have absolutely no idea what’s going on in this novel

Damn bro and here I thought I had a lot with 3.8k hrs, you got me beat lmao

Honestly you’re writing quality is great, im also glad you’re one of those authors who kept an “urban setting” realistic enough for each women to have their own nuances and not one of those “iF sHeS nOT a ViRgIn ShE’s A NobOdY”. however in 61 chapters (latest as of this review) MC is still over reliant on the system but at the same time also under utilizing it, which is crazy imo. I get it’s probably your way of showing his “low self confidence” in this particular area of expertise? However him not having done his “homework” if you will and seen what more the system has more to offer than the oil he’s hyperfocused on I can’t in good conscience give more than a 3 stars to story development. Ill probably update this review once MC has had some good character development. Keep it up!

Since when does she know about his second aspect? Satori has ever only shown his ember, and hasn’t talked about his ice breath with her in any earlier chapter.

Great chapter! Ask yourself this, what would Yukio do? He’s a soul in a different body, years of experience behind him, he knows what’s worth betting for, but even for him this is uncharted territory, it’s a new gamble for him. Would he put stakes on this new development? I personally think he would with how you wrote him. Kimiko on the other hand, she’s been alone with him ever since their parents died. She put everything for his future and he’s the only thing she has left, I could honestly see how taboo feelings could’ve developed on her side, pretty sure even in our world something like that happened at some point in time. Kimiko could also be too scared to lose her only family left with this development though. In my opinion option A, exploring this while keeping it grounded and realistic could be a great way for you as an author to learn and push yourself and it’d also be a great way to develop Yukio, Kimiko and whoever else is going to be in the harem outside of typical MHA arcs i.e USJ etc.

Teddy bear Daisy from ch. 1 I assume?