I truly enjoy the author's entertaining craft! There is so much irony in both the word play between the names of characters, their roles and their interactions. The devil is getting caught in his own web, unintentionally thwarted by the effects of his own selfish motives and devilish rash actions. He is thwarted by the purity of Heaven after trying to manipulate her for his selfish gains. Zamiel, a "demon", acts honorably and teaches wisely by example after being freed, accepted and inspired by Heaven. Zarin embodies common characteristics of many who grow up self-absorbed, accustomed to a pampered life. Their lack of diverse exposure to economic striving while growing up leads to latent maturity. He didn't value the immeasurable love and friendship surrounding him until it was lost. His highly selfsh demeanor seems to have prevented his ability to learn from the wisdom his father tried to teach him while growing up. Zarin finally begins to reflect on those lessons forced by now having to work to regain the ethereal virtues of life. His new mentors lead him to replace the emptiness of his former material pursuits with spiritual values which will sustain him no matter what his material surroundings may be. Heaven inspires everyone both symbolically and in their physical reality to move towards the greater good (even if inadvertently).

Thanks for those wise words!

Your story opening is good at hooking us readers in and making us curious to know more on more than one level.

Thank you for drawing out the respectful control and care of the experienced against the breathless, alluring desire of the innocent.

a truth for all to learn....

You are a gifted writer. Thanks for sharing your gift. It makes the world a more enjoyable place to be.

Grammar: the word "only" would be more effective if used once in either location of the sentence where it appears.

grammar: ".... when [they] saw Zamiel" punctuation: "Kate, on the other hand, was shocked when she saw Zamiel sitting next to her on the bed. Her eyes widened."

What?! Is this a dream or in real time? Good shock value for us readers, giving us reasons to hunger for more....

What?! Is this real or a dream?! Good shock value for the story!

Grammar! "sun rose"..."

Zarin is suffering from the repercussions (kick back) of being a slow learner!

"dry herself"

should be "baring its teeth..."

The story line of this chapter is well written and captivates reader's interest despite the spoiler at the beginning and the minor grammatical errors.

Why are you giving spoilers within the text? You are nullifying the suspense you have just built up for the reader and interrupted the flow of your story!

Thanks for the history lesson . More to love!

The 1st "Rin" should be "Yuna" for the context to make sense!

Who is Mina? It originally appeared that we were hearing the thoughts of Yuna!

I enjoyed seeing Heaven put her training to use. I'm relieved that Zamiel arrived in time to save Heaven. Your timing and pacing as a writer are wonderful.