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It appears the fraud removed my previous review so that others can't see it LOL. Bro really is shameless.

I would also like to add even without prior knowledge of the novel, it is very clear to a single human being with a functioning brain that something is up. I read a bit of this bastard's other novel and the writing style, the tone, and the overall quality was completely different; this isn't to say it was bad, it clearly works. However the changes in grammar and how the sentences flow do not match up at all, humans naturally have a preference when it comes to writing, and habits die hard. This is clearly seen with the polite speech Turan uses when talking to Keorn in the first chapter, he adds that it feels uncomfortable which stands out if the book was written in English, but not if it was written in Korean. Turan employs the use of the formal tone (합쇼체) which is alot more easier to notice and explain as it changes how you address yourself and how certain words are written and pronounced, types of speeches are a lot more important in Korean culture. The 'you' in 'Pleased to meet you' (만나서 반갑습니다) is different from the more common 'you' (너) used among friends. This wouldn't make sense in English and isn't something a character would point out, unless it was stolen and/or translated. The snake novel seems to be an original work from I've seen (though even that may not be true) and it is pretty successful so I wonder why would this guy risk losing it all? Though seeing as this has been going on for a couple months and this damned site hasn't done anything I guess he made the right call.

***forgot to end 'experience' with a parenthese

Ah right, forget to mention that the synopsis makes my eyes bleed holy heckin' balls man and that 'Infinite Sovereign' just doesn't mean anything. Like at all. If it was 'Sovereign of Infinity', sure but 'Infinity' still wouldn't make sense. Add something after Infinite, like 'Sovereign of the Infinite/Myriad Worlds' or just 'Sovereign of All'.

**wrote 'but' for some reason in the last paragraph

*forgot a comma between 'has' and 'character'

Iz me, guy who likes grammar. So yeah, the grammar in this story? 4.5/10 (Relatively better than most other books on the website as the standard has honestly fallen...) Why? Well to begin, small things such as punctuation (ya forget a lot of periods bro), weird choice of words, change in tenses where it shouldn't change, etc... (Small things I know, but these things add up fast and fixing them is easy and eases the reader into a better reading experience. And now to the moderately bigger problem the 1st chapter has character consistency (yes I only read the 1st chapter but if the author already has these types of issues in the beginning, I think it's reasonable to think that these problems exist in the later chapters). Well in this case, narrator consistency. In the beginning, the narrator is describing things in a neutral way; he is 'passive'. But sometimes he 'says' things in a way that makes it seem like a being talking to another; he is more 'active' in these scenarios. And the guy switches between the two rarely but it still confuses the hell out of me. Also another one of the moderate issues is the paragraph structuring which is pretty inconsistent as well. There was one where two separate ideas were placed in the same damn paragraph which makes me worry. Anyway that's that, again most of the issues listed are pretty damn easy to fix if you just proofread or get an editor. Oh my opinion on the story? Idk man. I'm only here to reveiw ze grammar. And even if I were to review it but, you can call me a bastard or whatever, I first gotta be able to read and understand the damn book before forming an opinion on it alright. It's just like the coding shizz from a video game, it don't matter if ya got nuttiest idea if you can't even execute/show it in the first place.

I feel like their would be a better dialogue option than this...

???? These two things do not belong in the same paragraph; they don't got the same subject.

I think 'folks' is the word you're looking for instead of 'fellows'.