Red_Pan_pan

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Red_Pan_pan4 years ago
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when u write flying running super fast it doesn't make sense and you forgot your comma
After a hour long drive ( yes he actually counted the seconds it took. ) they arrived at last he thought. Some strong looking guys opened the door at the back and picked him up as he looked around he saw people flying running super fast and lots more. He didn't know that people can have powers, and he wondered why he would want him he has no powers unless he just wants me to make me feel bad that I'm not cool, I'm unpopular and now I have no powers.
Jace.
Urban · CoolKittycat4284
Red_Pan_pan4 years ago
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the first paragraph u started of in 3rd person then went .on to 1st person try and improve that part except from that it's was an amazing story well done on
Jace.
Urban · CoolKittycat4284