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TacetIrae

TacetIrae

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I'm writing stories for pleasure of others.

2021-02-06 JoinedGlobal
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae1mth
    Posted

    thats definitely story with OP character. But there is a big issue with that, nothing feels real, dialogues are just like ripoff from cultivation young masters behavior and those that do that are kids which makes it even more wierd to read. To make this story interesting u need to make characters alive, make them behave like children do(throwing stunts and ultimatums, easily getting offended, but as easy to grand forgiveness, strive to make friends and please teachers to show themself, be scared of doing mistakes specially in the presence of teachers and so on and so on). Generally after thoughtful reading of 2 chapters I than read 5 more with skipping half of the content and till the end I just occasionally stopped to read a line. Everything feels way too unnatural and that makes it very hard to read a story and enjoy since it feels like translation, charactets don't behave naturally and dialogs are very awkward being kinda like with start and end , but without middle part where actual interactions take place. Overall this story has a loooot of potential , but for that potential to show itself authors has to be thoughtful of characters , do research if needed to show characters of people , refine dialogs, and make things just flow more natural. e. g Don't write about every day in academy, just make highlight moments when something of note takes place and is important for characters and their development of either powers or mentallity. Mundane day can be shown only once and it will be enough to show how it is and will be a base that will than compare to highlight to show what unique they are offering.

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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae1mth
    Commented

    why the language is so awkward? is it a translation?

    Ch 6 Acting School
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    Uchiha Fire Demon
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae2mth
    Replied to Nightsking

    it would be logical if villagers were the same as in the game, like silent guys with big noses that only hum and do some jobs that they are assigned. here they are fully human like and takes mc for the god presumably will never betray his as well. while dothrski are guys that kill each other for fun. and they hate magic, so why by this point in time he is not challenged by every fifth of his horde is a question and the fact that he was unmounted from his horse is like a death to a dotraki. their culture has this specific topic about being about to stay in the saddle and if not ,said one to be abandoned, killed or whatever, but definitely not being esteemed leader that everyone fearsfears. it's just doesn't make sense since any experienced fighter can tell as much as he is a noob at fight and while also WEARING armour he is fight foes while being a dotraki, that DON'T wear armor since it is an indication of being a little girl and weak.

    Ch 13 Chapter Thirteen: Heavyweight.
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    ASOIAF/GOT: Minecraft in Essos.
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae2mth
    Commented

    I rly fail to see his motivation to keep those savegaes near him he has unlimited amount of loyal man that won't run to ur enemy as soon as ure deafed, yet he still keeps them near, while all they can do is pillage and fight, which is the least important things when it comes to creating ur own kingdpm..

    Ch 13 Chapter Thirteen: Heavyweight.
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    ASOIAF/GOT: Minecraft in Essos.
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae2mth
    Posted

    it's good in its own way. first half of already released chapters are kinda disturbing but after that there is something I liked

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    The Honoured One
    Anime & Comics · Daoistz1VV3s
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae2mth
    Posted

    I have no idea what I just read. all i remember is phrase about him growing stronger and stronger and stronger. Basically this is all this story is about, sadly. Someone who wishes for plot and something that flows like river this is not what u could possibly enjoy. there is one event followed by another, and all in one chapter and from all perspective leaving basically 0 character development and leaving no chances to simply understand wtf is going on here. Even in Wishfullfilment stories there is plot and interactions that hold for longer than one phrase from a character albeit, sadly not in this story

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    Cursed Sentry
    Anime & Comics · Daoist0kxr4h
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae2mth
    Posted

    painful to read, plenty of annoying mistakes but that is not my main problem. for some reason mc is schizophrenic with a lot of hallucinations that don't make him appealing to me. really hard to read about character that I can't like. if you wish you read that novel be warned , there is very little logic in the mind of the mc.

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    NARUTO : jujutsu template system
    Anime & Comics · OLD_storage
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae2mth
    Commented

    very inconsistent. Child that is 15 years old, that should have behaviour that is fitting for strict and cold person, in a matter of minutes changes in a way that is not possible. if he never was loved , how could he understand what love is? so my conclusion is that u are writing about a guy who has some mental disease, since in RL it is not possible to change youtself in a matter of seconds

    Ch 4 First birthday
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    Harry Potter: I'm James Potter.
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae2mth
    Replied to Benoit_Valtin

    finish her off

    Ch 29 Death of two clowns (1)
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    Jason Todd: The different path (dropped)
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae2mth
    Commented

    finally! someone that is brave enough to kill those 2! ! GO FOR IT MAN, LEGEND

    Ch 27 Massacre of alien mutts and alien scum
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    Jason Todd: The different path (dropped)
    Anime & Comics · ashwini_prasad
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae3mth
    Commented

    13 chapters yet we are still in the stage where story didn't start. synopsis talks about one thing here we have some useless development when a guy is part of the game and nothing more. well it's boring ,hopefully u move to the actual plot of fan fiction soon....

    Ch 13 Calm Before The Storm
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    Got Stuck in Overlord as a NPC, Now I'm in Sothoryos?!
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae3mth
    Replied to FROSTYBLAZE

    same question never seen one mc that took first want and it was good enough

    "The materials include a tail feather from a particularly ancient Phoenix bird and the core of a hundred-year-old Elder tree. 
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    Harry Potter: Journey to Godhood
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae3mth
    Posted

    Good! Point about him being energy and all powerful yet not being able to accurately manipulate it is confusing and highly unbelievable. Yet matters of power aside I loved the plot. Something new like no villian or hero that ends up joining or opposing heroes but someone with his own plans that are neither good or bad. waiting to see how he will do the same with villains since for sure those guys just keep coming. good luck to author and this story! 😍

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    I Am Energy In Dc
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae3mth
    Replied to Lirg_Yob

    almost every Chinese novel about cultivation and systems are almost identical , they have thurthfully one of the most multiversal scale stupidity and 99 ℅ of the enemies are the young masters that grow like mushrooms in the season(but there is always someone behind YM like his dad , than his grabddad tha his sect master than master of the sect that controls this sect from the shadow than God of the sect than sect they God partake in) the scale just goes into infinity. good part is that author can write somethinh like this with ease since it does not require any plot. However there are decent Chinese novels but they almost all the time share one thing, SCALE! What is that thing with thousands of realms to reach and endless pop up of enemies. this is my opinion but almost like frustration since I read that 1 star is too low for this kinda novel. no offence for translator or ppl that like it

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    Battle Through The Heavens: Disciple Cashback System
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae3mth
    Commented

    where is this anxiety comes from? why is he paranoid about his strength? it seems that the characters was bullied all of his life and can't accept that there is anyone absolutely anyone stronger than him. yet he had not faced a single threat. He always talks about making someone stronger , but doesnt want to take big steps in this direction , he sits on his butt doing research for himself by himself , instead he could become famous in field of science and create a team that will help him. but I guess his sick paranoia that makes him wish to be the absolute strongest can't allow to trust others. I also can't seem to find the reason he makes all this serum other than empower himself , yeah sister go ahead be vampire never have a chance of having a baby be a cold blood corpse without having control of your own desires. sorry but I just don't seem to find his care for anything other than himself. he talks about worries for family yet his actions don't really match that much, his main concern in only about himself. I have no idea what author wanted to show but this is what I see. so it is only my personal analysis of the character

    Ch 16 Sixteen
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    ReLife In Fake Twilight
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae3mth
    Replied to Prognastat

    yeah I didn't mention anything bout the story just the way character of a person is developed

    Ch 6 Dear Diary II
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    Hades in the Multiverse
    Anime & Comics · Cedric_7512
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae4mth
    Commented

    that's exceptional kind of math

    I portaled about a mile (1.609km) in the sky and sent a telepathic pulse that put everyone to sleep. In a minute I had already scanned all the trash and the sleeping beauties on the facility. I did find some "innocents", if you can call them that, all of them knew what they were working on but these innocents were not directly involved in the horrors the girls suffered... I honestly don't care... You're responsible for your actions, and while it's true that people could change for the better if they are given a chance for redemption, you can tell that to the dead. 
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    Dragon in Marvel
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae4mth
    Commented

    that's a huge info dump

    Ch 4 Threats and Plans
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    Ōetsu Nimaiya - The Crafter
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae4mth
    Replied to AmouxCreationsX

    It’s not about that , it’s about how repetitive they are tbh. Try using something different or maybe not as much

    Ch 55 Chapter 55
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    Game Of Thrones: Another Dragons
    Book&Literature · AmouxCreationsX
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  • TacetIrae
    TacetIrae4mth
    Commented

    Ugh , how many times per chapters his majestic figure ascend , descends and ascends and descends and again again again. It’s just too much focus on this silly dragon , specially on his body movements

    Ch 55 Chapter 55
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    Game Of Thrones: Another Dragons
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