OmegaLul1234

I meant that the reviewer read (Red, not reed) until then, as it's quite early in comparison to whole story

2 things. 1: Roxy didn't have children in the original timeline, so rather it being her child overall that was special, it's more like it was her and Rudy's that was special. 2: In my fic, the hero of the beastfolk is different than the one who will aid in defeating Hitogami, so Hitogami doesn't really care about Seighart

Fellow Lloyd enjoyer

Sorry for the cliffhanger… or am I?

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Okay world building and story development, but the characters are extremely shallow, and the writing... typos, missing punctuation, just... bad writing. Even the 'edited' chapters are pretty bad. Overall, if you are fine with shallow characters and lesser than MTL-level writing, then sure, enjoy.

Good writing quality, but would like to see more emotional side to characters, but I suppose this is meant to be an dive into the magic system (even though it’s not thoroughly explained in the novel, only be Rudy, an unreliable narrator) I am wondering what will happen with the knowledge portion, especially with the teleportation incident, as that often destroys focus like these. After all, do they remove such an important plot point? Or do you have the MC not do anything, which is extremely idiotic in most cases. Only 10 chapters and just met Roxy, so nothing really to say about story development.

Lock at 4, after that the girls would just feel like accessories. Even now it's hard to give enough character insights while progressing the plot

But, it will be concentrated in R-18 scenes, which I plan to completely separate from main story going forward, so you can just skip those when there's 2+ girls if you want.

Definitely with Ariel, since she’s that way in the source material. If that’s not for you, then don’t read, thanks :)