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Detroittwo2yrCommentedWas NOT expecting that
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Everything in this novel looks beautiful. The writing, the wording, the characters, the emotions, the conflict, the mystery, the questions, this story has it all. The character design is really amazing, the plot of this story is rather unique, and the interactions from character to character really feel real. The landscape descriptions and the actions of some parts are very dynamic and fluid. I can easily picture a scene inside my mind with these chapters. I like how you plan ahead and make this world truly not empty. Keep up the good work, and continue to write!
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This is an amazing novel. There is so much going on, and wow. I love the wording and writing. I deeply like the magic in this novel. It’s so different and... eerily realistic. I love the characters already. I’m looking forward to more chapters, I will definitely add this to my collections. Keep writing author!
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This is Master level description.
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This is so cool.
"Now Daskin… construct your 'forest', and when your mind feels like you're ready: raise your palm in front of you and let Wind brush against the center of your palm. That way, with the combinations of both wind and nature; and the strong energy of your mind, it will merge and slowly summon an object, being, animal, or person from the very center of your tiny little hands. When your mind evolves; the requirements will decrease. And you would be able to form the 'forest' in your mind in mere seconds." - Detroittwo3yrCommented
Love the desperation in her words.
"Don't take them, they're sweet and loving. They don't deserve to be executed! Listen to the Witch of Poison, Mupheria, and take everything from the mansion. Don't you dare touch the young!" - Detroittwo3yrCommented
That’s so messed up.
It appears that my mother was stealing goods, along with currency during the past years we lived with her, just to keep us safe and well-fed. I seriously don't understand her motives, but it really dealt a significant pain in my heart that I finally got told about her actions. Even in a different world, no one can be perfect. And this presents that motive, clearly. - Detroittwo3yrCommented
That’s a large time skip.
It's been three or four years since my birth. I learned how to talk, but it was only a few words like 'Hello' and 'Goodbye'. I finally learned how to walk; slightly, and I'm starting to grow accustomed to the house I'm living in. Still; I hadn't heard Teriana say her first words; even though we share the same birthday. Hopefully; she speaks her first words at some point this year. - Detroittwo3yrCommented
pain.
As the gentle ambiance of the forest filled all of our ears, the witch slowly shook her head and lightly giggled. I could see her long lavender hair; fluctuating whilst the sun beamed on it. She's really beautiful; even if she is a witch. This really pains me that I'm so young that I can't even... ugh. - Detroittwo3yrCommented
There is so many OOF moments in this web novel.
"If only the corrupt Kingdom of Zomrack were not so cruel against your race. I-It... no one should leave such angels stranded in the forest. C-Come on... I'll take you to my house. I always wanted children. But, if I'm a Witch, there's no possible way I can have one. If you're born a witch, there is this certain barrier that blocks your reproduction rate. The witch race tried to craft our own children from our magic, b-but that doesn't w-work. They all misunderstood us, we're not..." - Detroittwo3yrCommented
Imagine how bad the story would be if they get devoured by wolves already.
Their saliva slowly seeped through their mouths, and their daunting eyes pierced through our souls. This is the end. It's over. I and Teriana are food; that's how it ends. - Detroittwo3yrCommented
OOF. Bad for baby.
Newborns are drastically vulnerable to anything; that's why their parents protect them and care for them. But, now... we don't have any loving parents. We both can't walk, we can't speak, we can't move. The only thing we can do is wail and cry for help. - Detroittwo3yrCommented
Wow, racial discrimination against a tattoo on their face. Nice. (Not.)
"The two children must be escorted out of here at once! They don't deserve to be on our lands and your arms. That's just how the rules of the city of Zomrack shall play out!--" - Detroittwo3yrCommented
Oh my, the luck.
"No, that can't be possible. She has a Soulmark as well?! N-No... that can't be... it... there's no way.." - Detroittwo3yrCommented
Oof, bad for him
This pain felt so brutal, I couldn't take it. I'm so vulnerable to pain. Am I going to die again? What's touching me? I saw that my mother's eyes were closed shut; slowly snoring as she softly holds my body. After a moment, the same pain grew worse. I just had to scream. - Detroittwo3yrCommented
OOF
As I slowly tried to walk away from the alleyway, without a second to notice I heard a loud bang behind me. A bright flash illuminated the dark walls. I felt an imminent painful feeling surrounding my head. Just before I knew it; my vision flashed to darkness. - Detroittwo3yrReplied to Detroittwo
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Oh my goodness, is this a genocide route?!
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Oh my goodness, is this a genocide route? LOL
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