Overall this story is consistent in quality throughout and would make for an excellent read if you have interest in this genre. It is consistently uploaded without sacrificing its effectiveness in writing. I'll be looking forwards to future releases.[img=recommend]

This is a beautiful one-shot with engaging dialogue that can set the scene and atmosphere on its own. The worldbuilding is intricate and see** through naturally through the character interactions with one another and the built environment. I will be patiently waiting for future stories set in this world. I found it most interesting that you chose to include the narrator as a character in that way. It made him appear as if speaking directly to us and the character at the end. However, I found it somewhat confusing at times in the narration. But is likely due to limitations of inkstone. I hope you continue to experiment with this technique in the future.

Thank you for your kind words. I'm glad the subtext behind the two was picked up. Their relationship will be very important to the progression of the plot, but maybe in a way that might disappoint you. For the rest of the story, I'll be sticking to the past tense. In the first segment, I was trying to mix up my style of writing following the advice of some self-help books. Didn't work as I expected, but I was satisfied with it enough to keep it as is. Again, thank you very much for your kind words. If you ever pick up TW: Attila, just remember that any battle can be won, with enough cheese and savescum.