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you should try 1st and then tell me how it is

Hello, thank you for taking the time to review my novel. I would be grateful for your feedback on any elements that may be missing. 🧐

It feels like a generated feeling not feels real

The story has a great plot and an engaging premise, but some parts feel forced, especially when it comes to character personalities. There are moments where the pacing moves too fast, making it difficult to fully connect with the characters or absorb important events. Slowing down certain scenes and allowing more natural character development would improve the flow. Despite this, the overall story remains enjoyable and has strong potential.

i am waiting for next chapter

I loved your novel. If only you could add a status window—not a system, just an ordinary status.

i think you should try reading this novel "The villain heroine delusions come back"

cool i don't like harem much

obsession

i will write volume 2 soon