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You have a great sense of world building, I'm just having trouble keeping up with the different names and hierarchical structure of the magic system, it's expansive, perhaps maybe give us a rundown of the Magic system so we can better understand it. otherwise keep it up, I struggled a bit with the first chapter but now that I'm past I'm enjoying the story quite a lot actually

Retainers, that word immediately brought me back to Vinland Saga 😂

The story is great , I'm Hungry for a little more world building which is a good thing coz it shows how immersed I am in the story. Like instead of just vaguely mentioning that Lumina and Celestria having similar cultures or Valeria having the strongest army I would like to know what practices they share culturally and what exactly sets Valeria's army apart from the rest of the world Or maybe in talks about political alliances and tension between the kingdoms, what exactly causes that? Is it a difference in Idealogies, maybe a past war had left a sour taste on the kingdom that ruined their relations or maybe Lumina allied with a Kingdom in a prior war and caused a divide with other kingdoms that were allies of other factions. Lol don't mind me, I'm just ranting about the story that just shows how much I'm enjoying it. But I love your work and this book deserves more attention! 🥳

I don't trust this guy 😂 I don't know why but I don't 😂😂

oh well, here comes Lumina's Great Depression 🤣🤣

exactly 😅

but then again, external perceptions can damage the kingdom's reputation and other kingdoms may cut ties, leading to breakdowns of economic relations and that sort of stuff, others can even attack when they perceive you as weak. I'm with the financial advisor on this one she doesn't see the bigger picture, or am I on the wrong side [img=thinking]?

finally someone said it lol 😂

I'm a sucker for world building. Exploring the relations between these Kingdoms and perhaps mentioning past events that caused this political tension could be great I'm so curious as to why things are the way they are

lol I feel you