Chubby snek~ •w•

Adding sandwich for variations.

Do people casually eating stone in this world setting? •_•

Even if hyphothetically it’s not poisonous, It’s still a stone…. •_•

Snek is Smart. :O

Opening a shop mid battle is really Something!

Thanks so much for reading! I’m really happy to see people actually read my story! The true color of this story started to be revealed at chapter 3, So I hope you can read it at least that far :D

Elias has been the chapter title for quite a while, Why is that?

WTF

Such low expectation lol

Can’t forget about the promise lol

One of my favourite part to write XD

Thank you so much for the honest review!! the shift from first to third-person point of view sure is quite random, I might try to not shift too much on later chapters. lots of typos, I might wanna look back at the earlier chapters. I'm glad you like the story and the characters! if you can feel the emotional moments in my story, it mean I managed to achieve what I want this story to be! I like sad stories lol

I'm glad you reading it this far! >_<

I really enjoy making the creator's thought part XD

a bit spoilery, but the reason of his name being rare is in chapter 3 :D

thanks for pointing lots of error! it saves me time to fix it later!

I'm really proud of this line! >_<

Oh I see, I’m not familiar with this word

Here is my honest review, I hope it could be useful! Flow: Is very good, I can keep reading it without stopping. Normally I often caught myself getting distracted or overwhelmed with wall of text, but this one didn’t make me feel that way. It’s really good! Grammar: Is very good! No noticeable error so far. You didn’t use any difficult to understand word which is a huge plus. Poetic sounding difficult words sounds good but my mind having difficulty processing it and often I got distracted, so I’m glad you’re only using easy and familiar words. Humor: An overall fun to read humor! There are some moments that might be better portrayed without emoticon tho, for the sake of seriousness. Example was in chapter 4 when protagonist met the purple eyed guy and felt an ache on her chest. Character: Protagonist is both fun and relatable. Also, I like how you made the issue in protagonists life more apparent rather than just mentioning it. Example is in chapter 4 when she saw her dad’s car and there’s a note to tell her ‘don’t use the car, btw, have a good day!’ It really emphasise that her relationship with her father had quite a problem. I know it’s mentioned in chapter 1 that they had grown apart due to some reason, but showing it in events like in chapter 4 made the experiences more engaging! Tone: Chapter 1 had a sad and serious tone, so the sudden tone change into humor in chapter 2 kinda caught me off guard. But it’s totally ok and nothing wrong with it. Personal: 1. The random emoticons are really cute! 2. Protagonist is very emotional. I like emotional protagonist because reading about their feelings is very fun! Bonus points if it’s relatable.