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Author, have you actually read this????? I think Google [Translate/AI] would do a better job... the current version—the one you’re using—is terrible. All the dialogue and the way the story is told are awful; please, rewrite it. Also, give the protagonist some kind of template or power-up—maybe Sasuke Uchiha from the *Boruto* era (though he’s a bit weak there, so maybe Sasuke from the Fourth Great Ninja War instead?), or some sort of "cheat" ability to help with training. Anyway, I’m giving five stars for the concept ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐, but only one star for the execution ⭐️. Please improve it—the idea is great! I like that the protagonist didn’t try to save the entire clan or go to war with the village, but he just lacks the necessary strength. The story itself and the dialogue are both terrible—everything is just awful. I’ll be waiting for new chapters—or, at the very least, try having Google rewrite it for you, section by section.

I’ve read 19 chapters—what can I say? The story is interesting, and the concept is generally excellent. 👌 It might have been better not to let the protagonist become powerful too quickly. I hope the author has the protagonist’s powers awaken during brutal, life-or-death battles—much like how Naruto Uzumaki’s connection to the Nine-Tails manifested gradually throughout the original series and *Shippuden*. The most important thing is that the author doesn’t break the power balance. 🤔 For instance, if Obito Uchiha were to fight him, he could theoretically bypass the "Infinity" defense, given the unique nature of his ocular technique. Think about it, author—this would also allow the protagonist to gain actual combat experience. The ocular technique is powerful, but don’t hand everything over at once; it should require training—years of training! And why reveal his lineage to everyone already? 🙄 That feels way too early. I also hope the protagonist doesn’t use shadow clones to train for ten different things at once—one clone practicing one technique, another practicing something else... it really ruins the immersion. If I recall correctly, that shouldn’t even work in theory—unless you’re focusing on mastering a single technique, like Naruto did. Some fanfic authors just don’t seem to get that! 🤡 😅😪😅😅 Looking forward to the next chapters.

Hahahaha, once I read that there’s no harem here, I decided to start reading this story! Hahahaha 😀😀😀

The realism is falling apart... It started off interesting, but the forced elements—like the fact that so many people already know he’s the one drawing the manga, even though he’s just an ordinary person with no special powers—it’s all just nonsense. Everything went downhill the moment the grandmother found out about the system. Couldn’t the protagonist have been given the ability to keep his identity hidden while still publishing his manga? And why not make it in color? What’s so difficult about that? If the system can provide him with resources, a printing press, and so on... honestly, it just feels like a "system of slavery"—which is complete rubbish. I actually like the core concept; it’s an interesting idea 💡. But, as always, authors ruin things by introducing these "slavery-like" systems. Plus, the fact that five or so people already know his secret—honestly, he should be getting interrogated by someone like Kakashi Hatake or Danzo Shimura by now! 😂 I really hope you fix this. I’ve only read 5–6 chapters, but the dialogue feels dull, and the characters’ behavior is just strange. The way the story is told—well, I’m not quite sure how to describe it—it’s as if the author never actually read it back, or perhaps the tone is just too depressing... I’m not a fan of depressing stories. 😅 5 stars for the idea ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐, but only 1 star for the execution ⭐.

The beginning is interesting, but Chapter 14 just killed it for me 😭. It feels like the protagonist is getting dumber... he’s acting like a show-off... a total clown 🤡. Also, having that much power at age five—I feel like the author is breaking the story with this. It just gets worse with every chapter ((. Maybe do a time skip? Having that kind of power after only five years and two months—that’s just too much. I really hope you fix this 🙏. I like the story, but there are moments that just don’t make any sense 🧠 🤔. On the other hand, I really liked how Danzo is portrayed here; it feels very authentic—unlike in many Chinese fanfics where Danzo tries to recruit everyone in the village into the Root. I even recall a detail about Might Guy: he wanted to join the Root, but Danzo turned him down, saying that someone like him wasn't a good fit. Do you see what I mean, author??? I hope you’ll correct these issues and improve the quality of the story.

I haven’t read the story yet, but while I liked the initial description, what followed was a bit disappointing 😅. I’ll give it 5 stars just for the premise, but why not use the "Shadow Monarch" template instead 🤔? You could have all his abilities powered by chakra, and replace his other skills with things like "Sage Body" and so on—an alternative that makes his power fit the world perfectly. That would be really cool! Also, why is an AI writing this??? Could you rewrite it yourself????

The story idea is interesting, but the author ruined everything—well, it feels like an AI is writing the story, not a human. The dialogue is terrible, the storytelling is awful, and even the World War arc is bad; the author really needs to rewrite it all. Or did you intend for this to be just a short story? If so, why not present the past events as flashbacks in future chapters? An alternate world? What for? Why not the original Naruto world? It ruins the immersion—do you see the problem, author? I hope you fix this. 🙏🙏 Will the MC be 20 years old when he remembers everything? Why so long? Seriously, author, please rewrite this; I hope you revise the chapters and make them better.

The story is interesting and I like it, but there is one problem... the percentages (%) that every other shinobi talks about—it feels like nonsense and breaks the sense of reality; that sort of thing just isn't possible—having everyone able to gauge chakra levels at exactly 10% or 20%... Also, it’s hard to detect such minute changes—even an ANBU or the Third Hokage himself might struggle with that. 🤔 And then there’s the fancy terminology you use; it sometimes spoils the story. There’s too much of it at times, and there are instances where characters shouldn't even understand the meaning of those words... 😅 I hope I’m making sense. (Used Google Translate).

I'm looking forward to the new chapters! Merlin himself has finally appeared—I was getting tired of it always just being the heirs... that trope was getting old. Merlin is really cool, I love it! 😊 Please don't disappear, author! 🥺

Can someone tell me if the MC is gay? Like, one of those "blue" guys? Or are there normal guys here who sleep with girls? Please tell me 🙏🙏🙏 I hope the MC is normal. ????