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Two words: chapter padding. I read to chapter 20, and it keeps getting worse. Seems like 15% of the chapters are repeating or rephrasing something that was mentioned earlier or drawing out the details of character interactions to annoying lengths...all to increase chapter length. Also, the blind girl who has been blind her whole life feels as helpless as someone who just went blind. Should she be impared? Yes. Should she be utterly helpless? No.
You use "unhurriedly" a lot. Use slowly, leisurely, lazily, and nonchalantly as well to give a better variety of words that basically mean the same thing without sounding repetitive.
Four times now? You use it so often that it loses its meaning.
Saying "This..." is a good way to show shock, but you are using it too much. It becomes less impactful when you use it two to three times per chapter. Save it for really huge situations and mix it up with sayings like "Oh no" or something similar.
The word you are looking for is "hasten." Fasten means to attach things together, like fastening your seatbelt or a rope. Hasten means to make something go faster.
Good grammar and story, but it's got a lot of subtle and hidden repetition along with just enough unnecessary details that I lost interest. The author is good at disguising it, but it's chapter length padding nonetheless. If you read this, just know that there will probably a good handful of sentences per chapter that are either paraphrased repetitions or completely unnecessary details that add absolutely nothing to the story or mental picture being pained...and it gets worse as the story progresses. ⬆️ See what I did there? Expect that a lot from this book!
Low intelligence is on a roll...
Sunny! It's Warren!
You'd think Cassie could see his Aspect and such, and she would know it was Mordret.
Poor Cassie
At least let him nibble on Kai first to make the task easier!
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Still need Scavi to take a nibble out of Effie.
Nephis controls fire now. Of course she cooks. She is one with the flame. She is Lord of the Flames.
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