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HeroiBadadep

HeroiBadadep

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Just a new aspiring writer here

2021-01-08 JoinedPhilippines
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  • HeroiBadadep
    HeroiBadadep5 years ago
    Replied to HeroiBadadep

    And by the way, it's not necessarily be "My eyes fixed on Danton"... This small line is up to you

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  • HeroiBadadep
    HeroiBadadep5 years ago
    Replied to MrLollip0p

    It's a no problem pal

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  • HeroiBadadep
    HeroiBadadep5 years ago
    Replied to HeroiBadadep

    "As I heard *him* say"

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  • HeroiBadadep
    HeroiBadadep5 years ago
    Commented

    Another suggestion my friend for the first few lines. I hope you don't mind ahehe... "My eyes fixed at Danton, I got shocked as I heard.... *and so on*" Btw, I enjoyed reading this from the start

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  • HeroiBadadep
    HeroiBadadep5 years ago
    Commented

    A suggestion for the stuttering part. Instead of putting dots, why not "I-I" and "Wo-Won't"

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