The only qualms I have with this story are the occasional slips in grammar and spelling, and the information on the background and potential enemies. There should be more memories from different characters perspectives and more insights into their various pasts. It gives them more depth and helps the reader to connect with them and really get into the story.

An excellent start to this story. The developments are well placed and timely, but neither extravagant or lacking as befits the beginning of a tale. The story is developing nicely, but the characters are a little cliché. The main character is decently unique, but the other characters are obvious in their desires, backgrounds and personalities.

The writing quality could be better. There were lots of typos and the grammar is inconsistent. The characters are good, but some of the less important ones could use some elaboration. Otherwise good, look forward to seeing more.

That's a hilarious development

Wow. You go snake lady!

A good book. Every time I read it, the few chapters that there are get better and better. Very good character development although, his powers could be cooler. But there's only 19 chapters. It's getting there! Look forward to seeing more

Can't wait to see what happens next!

The world background and character background is really confusing and hard to understand. Why is the character where he is? How the heck did he get there? Confusing. But everything else is good.

I liked the main character, except he is a bit too money-grubbing for my taste. But I understand why he's that way so it's okay. The world background is very simple but understandable and good. Not too complicated or mucky or cluttered. Look forward to seeing more

That's cool but a bit excessive.

It's not stupid. The eyesight of birds is better than that of humans

Instead of Bird's view, it should be Eagle's view or something like that. Not all birds have great eyesight.

Only worth it if at least half of the book is free

The kingdom should have taken this into account but I guess they don't have too much combat experience yet.

This was a well written start to what could be a very good story if the author does it right. However, it has the potential to go wrong if there aren't some concrete developments happening soon for the characters. Don't mess up and look forward to seeing more!

This was rather well written and designed however, the background explanation was rather dim and the character seems kind of stupid sometimes. Even so, I look forward to seeing more of this.

A good story. However, there are lots of spelling mistakes that really take away from the plot. The development was very well done as were the characters. The world background is extremely and is missing some parts like how Alex got to that planet anyway since it seems like he has memories of Earth. Hope the author will improve the mistakes and I look forward to seeing more in the future.

Great that Theo has the brains to do something like that and the wherewithal to properly torture the scum of a young master that that guy is. Thanks for the great chapter!

This was a pretty well written novel so far. Even though the explanation of the sectors and portals and everything was a bit sparse for my tastes, I can understand why there aren't more. The characters are very well done and the system even has a teacher. All in all, a job well done. Look forward to seeing more!

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