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ah yes, the mythical medieval shower, must be some devil magic, the guard captain is some heretic devil worshipper for sure
you really should make up your mind on whether to write the whole fight in past tense or present tense, switching every other paragraph is quite jarring
with every paragraph you're losing me more and more, just develop the plot instead of writing pure stupidity...
There seem to be less and less typos and grammatical mistakes since the last chapter I commented on, so I think I'll stick with it and hope for more improvement until It all gets ironed out. When it comes to the story it's very enjoyable, if a bit too fast-paced in some parts. The MC has some depth already and the world-building feels unique, definitely has potential and I can't wait to see where it goes from here
I would say the amount of matter and energy, the "mass of energy" sounds a bit weird. Also considering you convert energy into mass here, mentioning energy seems redundant
I feel like the training arc was a bit too long, maybe 2-4 chapters too long, some things were a bit repetetive/redundant imo, but I'm happy to see that Shang finally figured out the moral hurdle that was plaguing him. It's not the way I would've liked it to turn out as Shang seems a bit too inhuman to really immerse myself in his character, but I'll enjoy it nonetheless. Anyway I'm glad it's over and we can get on with plot and see the rise of the Swordwhirlwind Kingdom haha
The only crime here is what I did to your mom Oooo