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Not sure why you are adding a hypen...just nine months.
"Three months later" (no hypen & pluralize the word month).
This comment "kick him where the sun doesn't shine" does not fit with the rest of the book's theme of castles and princesses...its a modern phrase & a bit juvenile.
This story had me hooked from the 1st paragraph! Interesting story line, mysterious secrets to unravel and I'm interested in the "Return of the Devil's Son". One suggestion for the author...get someone to proof-read. There are a lot of punctuation, grammar & spelling errors. Some errors were in the middle of intense scenes that take away from the imagery. It is always "anyway", never "anyways" otherwise it sounds a bit juvenile. Klara's name was even misspelled once and I was lost for a second thinking "wait, who is Kara?" The last scene is supposed to be serious and Pierre says "Look who one his knees". The power of that line was totally lost.