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AC_F59hReplied to OBEYDE_Xwell I would say the only good thing about this novel is the idea/concept to create this novel.. this not to dismiss this novel but to criticise the author to make improvements.. I have read 2 chapter and stopped because so many thing just doesn't make sense.. I would suggest to set the age off the mc atleast to between 6-9 years to make everything happend up till chap 2 plausible.. also there is a lot of spelling and grammer mistakes.. I would suggest to rewrite/correct the chapter before writing new ones.. please do your research because it's not just an age issue.. Even if you want a fast pace novel or OP MC.. just meditating for 1-2 and him reaching foundation stage doesnt seem plausible.. of course it could happen because of the system but then you would have build your novel/chapters that way.. now it just seems the mc makes major leaps out of nowhere.. Even though I have read only 2 chapter I can still make out of your writing that you also need to work on your world building, character building etc.. again all in all the novel has some potential if you make some(a lot of) corrections
- AC_F59hCommented
a 3 year old walks from school to home🤨..
Then he decides to walk home toward Aliya. 30 minutes later he dropped Aliya at his home and then 15 minutes later he arrived at his home. - AC_F510hReplied to Brent_6064
I agree
Neville Longbottom's turn was one of the lengthier ones. The Sorting Hat seemed to ponder deeply before finally shouting, "Gryffindor!" Harry, who had secretly hoped Neville might join his sister in Hufflepuff, felt a slight disappointment wash over him. He had tried to influence Neville's placement, thinking Hufflepuff would be more supportive for him, but it seemed fate had other plans. Regardless, Harry resolved to continue supporting Neville in any way he could. - AC_F58dCommentedYan Guo: "Yan Guo" (炎国) is a combination of two Chinese characters. "Yan" (炎) refers to fire or burning, while "Guo" (国) means country or nation. Together, "Yan Guo" could be interpreted as "Fire Country" or "Burning Nation".
- AC_F511dCommented
Yes I hope evo will regrow the lost arm.. but I also hope MC healing power would grow stronger (quality and quantity)
Rex found a secluded place and used his abilities to treat Machop. He had hoped his life energy could regenerate Machop's arm, but unfortunately, he failed. Life energy only healed Machop's accumulated injuries and the wounds from the recent battle; it couldn't regenerate lost limbs. - AC_F511dCommented
Danzo: hmm.. the tea is very nice today MC: I'm glad you liked it.. I brewed it myself Danzo: Who dares!? ugh! Y-y-you what have you done! ugh! MC: Hahaha.. Can't believe how easy this was.. I should've done this sooner.. to save me from the headaches you gave me..
In a room shrouded in darkness, the only light source was a candle that illuminated half the face of a man who sat on a tatami with a cup of steaming green tea placed before him. - AC_F513dCommentedJust when she was very upset, Logan leaned close to Robin's ear, and said softly: "Probably..., I don't want to see you continue to be alone"
- AC_F513dReplied to _AlenkarTo complicate matters, Logan found himself on an unfamiliar ship without any navigation skills. Fortunately, the ship carried enough food to prevent him from becoming the first traverser in history to starve despite possessing a cheat.
- AC_F513dReplied to Tehn
👍 you're welcome!
"Well Michael, my predictions aren't limited to the stock market alone. I would like us to get invested in the world of electronics as well. Specifically the pineapple phone which is currently under the works by Steven Johnson. We must secure a large amount of shares in that company no matter what. And that's why I've been saving our wealth up for this moment and now it's finally here. Any questions?" I asked, expecting a skeptical response from him. - AC_F514dReplied to Tehn
yeah it's legal.. if you use it for descriptive purposes.. in other words to enhance the authenticity and reading experience with real world references.. and it serves a literary purpose within the narrative, it should be acceptable... and unless your actively promote it, try to influence readers, misleading people, make money on names/ branding/ products etc while not having permission/license then you could end up in trouble.. you can google it ("fair use") or let chatgpt explain it to you.. I would suggest chatgpt as you can ask question what you can and cannot do.. even for writing fan fiction novels..
"Well Michael, my predictions aren't limited to the stock market alone. I would like us to get invested in the world of electronics as well. Specifically the pineapple phone which is currently under the works by Steven Johnson. We must secure a large amount of shares in that company no matter what. And that's why I've been saving our wealth up for this moment and now it's finally here. Any questions?" I asked, expecting a skeptical response from him. - AC_F514dCommented
why do authors change the names of products an people.. it not like you're endorsing them.. you can just use the real product name and persons.. since you're just using them as descriptive purposes..(fair use is a legal doctrine)
"Well Michael, my predictions aren't limited to the stock market alone. I would like us to get invested in the world of electronics as well. Specifically the pineapple phone which is currently under the works by Steven Johnson. We must secure a large amount of shares in that company no matter what. And that's why I've been saving our wealth up for this moment and now it's finally here. Any questions?" I asked, expecting a skeptical response from him. - AC_F514dReplied to bearburrable
probably our gen liked more rougher looking pokemon.. and each next gen they made it more cute and harmless looking.. since each next gen like these asthetics more.. ( each new gen turning them more to softies.. since the higher ups don't like people who can have strong/rougher minded/opinionated people + brainwashing the herd with gender and sexual orientation bs) you can also see this with the cartoons/anime in the past and now..
"Grow-Growlithe," the little Hisuian Growlithe says to me as it makes its way over to me wagging his tail. The little guy has extremely deep red fur, with a stark white mane that covers his eyes and a stark white tail. Three black stripes across his back, two black stripes across his hind legs, and one black strip across his two front legs. - AC_F517dCommented
yeah I'm really disappointed with last few chapters.. It just ruined the novel for me.. In my opinion even if you somehow make the MC get back at Tang San it's pointless.. the whole idea of getting to the hidden/secret garden was to take the chance/fortune from Tang San.. @author sorry but I'm dropping this.. It's just my personal view.. I do wish you good luck with other readers
Ch 184 Chapter 182: Smashing the Store and Getting Free Food? What's This Strategy! [2nd Update]_1 - AC_F518dCommentedCh 182 Chapter 180: A Fire in the Backyard! [2nd Update]_1
- AC_F520dReplied to Shivam_Thakur_1883
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Zhang Yang manipulated it with his mind, and the sun slowly revolved around the blue star. - AC_F520dCommentedZhang Yang manipulated it with his mind, and the sun slowly revolved around the blue star.
- AC_F524dReplied to Mattex97
FYI.. you're correct that he didn't sacrificed himself but he also wasn't killed.. it was more like a last ditch attempt at killing Orochimaru while commiting suicide..
He didn't really have any objections to the Will of Fire. In the original work, when the Third-Hokage sacrificed himself to embody the Will of Fire, it moved him.