Oh, it's definitely those three. XD

another misspelling of Milo

Misspelled Milo's name.

There is no such thing as too many times! Lol

I usually try to get out 2-3 chapters a week minimum, but sometimes life gets in the way and it doesn't happen that way.

Your writing is well thought out and other than a few minor corrections it's well written and grabs the readers attention quickly. It leaves the reader curious enough to want to continue reading to find out more. Well done.

Try 'rinsed' or maybe 'would rinse' otherwise the tense shifts mid sentence.

This might read better if you phrase it as "All terms that can be associated..." and "yet is to foolish..."

I think you missed a word, it should be "I'd lost"

did you mean lap?

check the spelling of Lycan

Repetitive, vonsider revisement.

The tense of the last sentence here is a little off.

Instead of "Did I just reborn?" try "Have I been reborn?" or "Am I reborn?"

consider "I never feared death, I feared what followed it"

consider removing "inside" or changing it to "filled the inside of my heart"

the second "god's" should be Gods

"god's" should be capitalized.

I would either capitalize "the" or remove it all together. Authority would flow smoother if it were "authorities"

I'm working on getting a facebook page set up for it, I will link it here for you once I have it set up! Thank you!