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Kyle_Baronet5mthCommentedI think this should be 80 not 82. It you take away the bonuses it should come out to 690 for both magic and mp
[Magic: [770]{+82}- Kyle_Baronet7mthCommented
Another correction here. It’s “thrashing” Not ”trashing”. Just trying to help. Love the story by the way. Great job so far
Level two, was the next stage of his training and Derek wasn't happy to see it, he had finally mastered Level one and would love to dish it out on Steel but who knew the android was this petty, it couldn't even withstand a few trashing from its student, he was technically Steel's student and Steel's action froze his mind. - Kyle_Baronet7mthCommented
The correct spelling is “dodged” not ”dogged”. Please fix for future and past chapters. It’s came up a few times with incorrect spelling.
Suddenly, Steel increased his speed and appeared as Derek was mildly shocked to see him close the gap faster than he could react. Steel sent a sweeping kick towards Derek's foot which he dogged by flipping backward again. While Derek was stabilizing himself Steel went for his deadly combo. - Kyle_Baronet7mthCommented
It’s not “diamonds in the sand”, the saying is actually “ looking for diamonds in the rough”.
After that Liz chose the next stop in their group date, as a magic blacksmith she tends to wander around in the commercial district of the city to look for some things, besides studying and creating new kinds of magic technology she also likes to look for "diamonds in the sand". - Kyle_Baronet8mthCommented
Hey just as a heads up for future chapters the correct word to be used it “dove” not “dived”. Just wanted to let you know. Great story so far. Keep it up
In the end, Shi Meng added another critical hit. His entire body leaped up like a ferocious beast. He then dived head first, sending his fists attacking like a flood dragon, smashing heavily into the mutant's head. - Kyle_Baronet9mthReplied to PRO_GAMER_2345
Quite a few but its still a good read and better grammer then most on here.
After this, the dean stopped for a moment to let everyone digest what he said while various teammates congratulated the top rankers. Amongst the candidates, the happiest was Ray's team as everyone within the team has found a place in the top ranking. Even Tim, who got the 10th position within the rankings was extremely happy and continuously thanked Ray and even made a vow to follow him to greatness. However, it was not only Tim who made a vow to follow Ray, all of his teammates had come to him and thanked him very much while everyone vowed to follow him as their team leader. After all, the rewards that Ray had helped them obtain by making them reach the top ranking of the special class were nothing short of unimaginable as everyone knew that the top cream of 'Academy For System Users' got the best rewards and techniques along with various artifacts to help them train and become stronger. - Kyle_Baronet10mthCommented
“Seize” should say “cease” instead. Wrong word was used.
To which his system replied, "Yes, I'm sure of it. I can never mistake that suppressing aura of greatness and royalty and right now it's coming from him. Moreover, he seems to have advanced while giving the test as well. Other than that, there is another aura also coming over from him. It's an aura that even makes me feel frightened". - Kyle_Baronet10mthCommented
Instead of “top cream” is should say “Cream of the crop”. That would be the proper saying!! Thank you for the story so far. Pretty interesting. Along the way if I find anything to add I’ll definitely comment.
After this, the dean stopped for a moment to let everyone digest what he said while various teammates congratulated the top rankers. Amongst the candidates, the happiest was Ray's team as everyone within the team has found a place in the top ranking. Even Tim, who got the 10th position within the rankings was extremely happy and continuously thanked Ray and even made a vow to follow him to greatness. However, it was not only Tim who made a vow to follow Ray, all of his teammates had come to him and thanked him very much while everyone vowed to follow him as their team leader. After all, the rewards that Ray had helped them obtain by making them reach the top ranking of the special class were nothing short of unimaginable as everyone knew that the top cream of 'Academy For System Users' got the best rewards and techniques along with various artifacts to help them train and become stronger. - Kyle_Baronet10mthCommentedCh 5 Relying On The System Too Much
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3,800% not 3,600%. 3,000% from the increase of 300% per 10% god body and 800% from ability 1
Therefore, the divine body that he had achieved could allow him to fight against those of a higher realm. The increase in his combat strength in the perfected state could reach 3600%. - Kyle_Baronet10mthCommented
It you want this logic to make sense then for every 1,000 points used needs to give an increase of 1% so that when he uses 10,000 points he will get an increase of 10%. If the current logic of 1,000 points for 0.09% is used and he gets to 1% by spending just a bit over 10,000 points and receives the 300% boost then by the time he gets to 100% god body he would have a 30,000% boost in strength which would be completely different then what was stated previously by saying he would have a bonus of 3,600% (which I also posted is incorrect math earlier). Just trying to help make things make more sense for the readers so they don’t have to stop reading to figure out the math doesnt work with what’s been stated previously.
"The entire family's wealth has increased by 10%." - Kyle_Baronet10mthCommented
He Would actually gain only 3000% increase once he reaches 100%. Then once he enters combat he would gain an additional 800%. That in turn would be a max increase of 3800% when in combat. Please correct this!!
"When my divine body reaches 100%, will my combat strength increase by 3600%?" - Kyle_Baronet10mthReplied to Kyle_Baronet
Correction 0.09% per 1,000 points and point 0.9% per 10,000 points. So he should be at 0.99% if he used the 10,000 points and no less.
[God's body (over 10): 10%] - Kyle_Baronet10mthCommented
This should be 1.1% since before he only had 0.1% using the 1000 divinity points. Logically speaking he should be at 1.1% after using 10,000 divinity points. That’s an increase of 1% per 10,000 points. Please fix your math so that it can reflect the 10% required for improving is god body!!
[God's body (over 10): 10%] - Kyle_Baronet10mthCommented
Please get the pronouns right. The luck goddess is a “she”, not a ”he”. Please and thank you
He had experienced and witnessed the birth and death of many existences… - Kyle_Baronet10mthCommented
I think you meant platinum dragons not pregnant dragons. Been reading through these chapters and it’s been a very painful reading experience. You seem to have a hard time tempering who’s male and female. Also I wish you did more spell check and grammer checks before publishing. You could always use the spell check function if Microsoft word.
"Eight god-level dragons, more than 30 demigod-level dragons, hundreds of pregnant dragons, and more than 30,000 gold-level dragons." - Kyle_Baronet10mthCommented
Can you not say he will “ride them to school” instead it needs to say “he will escort them to school” or ”take them to school”. Your word usage is very inappro priate and can be interpreted incorrectly. Please fix this going forwarard and in previous chapters!!
Once they were done eating, Ethan would ride Hazel to her school first, then he'll ride Aiden to his own where the registration and all that would take place, then he'll ride to his destination.