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DaoistpLvNME7mthReplied to King_JROnot there yet man God calm down give it a year or so
Sansa did not want to be a queen like in the series. Since her mother passed a few years before she didn't get ruined due to the septa and her mother constantly putting bullshit into her head.- DaoistpLvNME7mthReplied to Wacher
the best part is this was what I imagined doing at first lol hahah
Jon dons his armor and the wolf mask he just thinks it's cool now he has to where it into battle. He takes hisnfirst step out for the array and the walkers move forward on their skeleton horses. They made heavy ice lances and just wanted to run him down at this time. The night king must have sensed something as his sent his generals in to fight other then the fodder. - DaoistpLvNME7mthReplied to Anonny_AnonymousCh 4 perks and recreation
- DaoistpLvNME7mthReplied to Hacku
no not really as of yet
Next in the system is the shop. As you requested you can buy anything in the multiverse if you wanted and had enough coin you could buy a spaceship and left this planet or a dimensional shift unit to go back to earth if you want. But don't expect to because there is not enough mana or wealth on the planet for that. - DaoistpLvNME7mthReplied to Taro
I'm kind making up the timelines as I go I could do the research and know every detail but I'm just havin fun
The entire time he was waiting he finally understood and said "stupid child body and Brain I know what she was doing now but I could not even think of her like that. Or that she actually does that kind of thing." The only other thing playing over and over in his mind was the sight of her standing there still quivering and holding herself. He thinks " even though she is my mother in this life. She really isn't there is nothing to be ashamed of from seering her body. Should I try to to seduce her when I grow more. Hmm. This may change my plan a bit for the future. But for now hold ill hold that thought". - DaoistpLvNME7mthReplied to TaroCh 8 struggles of childhood
- DaoistpLvNME7mthReplied to SirJuan_JuanCh 6 Moving out
- DaoistpLvNME7mthReplied to Taragorm
I know it is a struggle lol but it's a good concept and will be better later
The ROB let's Jaxon know this and to his surprise Jaxon agrees without hesitation. His reasoning is he is already dead and does not want to suffer with the memories of his last life. The ROB thinks about this for a moment and then agrees. Since he also knows that Jaxon will lose his memories he decides to take and give a little. He will know about the wishes and his meeting with the ROB but that is all so he will know this is the only option and he chose to continue and the rob decided to let him keep a little extra. The ROB looked at Jaxon and smiled his cashier smile and finally said goodbye to a friend, or his entertainment one of the two. - DaoistpLvNME7mthReplied to King_JRO
to a point he will still have to learn what do when nessacary like what would be most effective at a certain time
2. I grant you the power to control all elements. - DaoistpLvNME7mthReplied to ssyffixCh 1 Unexpected Reality
- DaoistpLvNME8mthPosted
has a good plot. easy to read not many errors that I've noticed and if they are there then it's not to the point of confusing the reader. could improve on the relationship and character interactions as some seam forced to proceed the story and I get that. all in all one of the better ff in this genre in my opinion keep up the good work and post more chapters as soon as possible. thanks
- DaoistpLvNME9mthCommentedCh 12 Chapter 11
- DaoistpLvNME1yrPosted
Hey, dropping this here as constructive criticism, the story has a really exciting and refreshing system, even though Mc is not the typical Mc he is smart .... or so I would like to think if we new anything about the characters other than cultivation levels, I'm not complaining because it is still interesting. but without any character development and knowledge it was like reading a list of events. one other thing is that the chapters were short and I read everything very quickly, a lot of this will come with time and experience and reading and trying things out, I'm not an author so I do not know the struggle. I would advise as the reader to put more feeling into the characters and the world your trying to build,and if you can do that it will all come together nicely. hope this helps. I will keep reading because it is a new story and I hope it ages like fine wine.
- DaoistpLvNME3yrCommented
why am I picturing golem here lol
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