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paula_shene1yrCommentedeither a comma or semi-colon after the word flings
“That is impossible!” She knew Farrah had a tendency of being flirtatious but that’s only for flings never will she give up her virginity that easily.- paula_shene1yrCommented
eliminate the word out
He then gave to her to snap out her senses back. - paula_shene1yrCommented
got his cell not her cell
To stop her from feeling embarrassed, he quickly got her cell phone in her hand and enter his password to unlock it. - paula_shene1yrCommented
eliminate word been
He smiled at her. It was too obvious that this girl was never been touched before. Her innocent eyes turned him on. - paula_shene1yrCommented
never felt before from any others or never felt from others eliminate the
Gab admitted that he enjoyed their night together. He found his enjoyment for this girl is quite special that he never felt before from the other. He could have just brought her to the hotel, but his hand drove his car home instinctively. - paula_shene1yrCommented
excited not excites
At first, it was just an order from Bill to play with her for some time. He was not decided to help him when they get into the bar, but when he saw her dancing on the dance floor with her explicit beauty he was stunned and feel the urge to be with her. That night, he found her beauty mesmerizing and her cheerfulness excites him. - paula_shene1yrCommented
He had not - replace the word was
At first, it was just an order from Bill to play with her for some time. He was not decided to help him when they get into the bar, but when he saw her dancing on the dance floor with her explicit beauty he was stunned and feel the urge to be with her. That night, he found her beauty mesmerizing and her cheerfulness excites him. - paula_shene1yrCommented
eliminate too
“I don’t know too either.” Gab smiled at her and his eyes flickered. - paula_shene1yrCommented
loved
His words brought warmth and joy to her heart. Farrah knew she already love him. - paula_shene1yrCommented
use words for numbers Seven pm
“7 pm tomorrow at Grand Sky Hotel. Meet me there. Will have dinner with my parents. Our contract will start tomorrow.” Bill picked up her chin to look at him. - paula_shene1yrCommented
Are you threatening me with
“Are threatening me of Farrah?” Arabella quickly asked. - paula_shene1yrCommented
busy enough to not or aren't you too busy to play tricks eliminate enough
“What are you trying to do? Aren’t you busy enough to play tricks on me?” Arabella said angrily. - paula_shene1yrCommented
either eliminate something or change the word sourness to sour
She didn’t want to admit that there’s something sourness in her heart that she couldn’t explain. - paula_shene1yrCommented
stopped the girl and she quickly
“Shhh…Behave. “An imposing voice stopped the girl and quickly left the room with an angry look in her eyes. - paula_shene1yrCommented
only call his secretary not her
“I am sorry Ms. Jones. I can only call her secretary. We don’t have direct access to the CEO’s direct line.” The blonde receptionist tried her best to replied professionally to her even if she’s still in big shock. - paula_shene1yrCommented
should be hands
‘Farrah is in good hand.’ - paula_shene1yrCommented
If not for his father - wrong pronoun her
If it’s not for her father’s dying wish, there is no way he will comply with this unworthy arrangement. - paula_shene1yrCommented
she is in good hands - needs an s
“Don’t worry about your friend. She is in a good hand. Worry about yourself.” Bill’s voice was cold and unhappy, enough to send shivers to her spine. - paula_shene1yrCommented
while tapping her not his shoulder
“Hey Darling, care to share your thoughts?” Farrah said while tapping his right shoulder. She saw Arabella was like floating with her thoughts while holding her coffee. - paula_shene1yrCommented
Do you mean you met him? not meet
“What? What happened? Do you mean you meet him? Oh my gosh! Tell me, please. What does he look like? Is he really as oozing hot as what we have seen in magazines?” Farrah giggled and couldn’t help to flood her with questions about Bill Sky.