Cloud_Clpid2

Thanks for the chapter

New chapter !

Thank you for the chapter

Thanks for the chapter! There’s nothing wrong with the slow pace but I definitely think Adam should become a beyonder very soon since it’s not like he’s going to speedrun the pathway like Klein did.

I think he mentioned that he didn’t really watch/read anything about the story he just knew some of the general plot

You could also have tried out hanged man pathway. I feel like everyone always overlooks this broken pathway

Haven’t read this in a while since I dropped it but he chose to protect her because he didn’t like how she was treated by the main cast during that arc so he stepped in and made himself to be the hero for her and gain some advantage since she comes from a powerful. And then he decided to have actual feelings for her when that was never his primary goal. Plus it’s still weird that a grown man all of sudden falls in love with a kid idc if he’s technically a kid he’s an adult in mind/soul

I think it’d be better to have the story mostly in 3rd person and maybe switch back to 1st person if you need to flesh out a character’s thoughts in a chapter