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I am a aspiring writer, I will hopefully be given the opportunity to share with you my novel "The coming light" in the future. Always open to other opinions and feedback. Thank you all for reading.
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2nd sentence 4th line (he took the step forward) should read ( he took a step forward) the word the is not needed
3rd line last word to 4th line 3rd word, the sentence should read (they have no choice) the wording with (they got no choice) is improper grammar.
6th line down should have a (the) after Shakier. It should look like this (the shakier *the* ground became)
Did you mean "the pale coldness of his body" the and would be redundant