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BDean29mthPostedAuthor, I think your creativity is spot on, and you have great potential to be successful writer! 💯 Just a bit of advice… Now that you’ve reached the end of this story, it would be a GREAT FAVOR 🙏🏽🙏🏼 to future readers if you could go back and PROOFREAD your work — making grammatical corrections and changing incorrect word usage where applicable. Please STOP using words you don’t fully understand or know how to use in context; seriously, that’s a major issue you have. 😩 It’s okay to use simple language if you have to because it will save the readers a few braincells 🧠 from trying to comprehend what the heck you’re talking about! LOL Overall, it’s a good plot, but the poorly quality writing is quite distracting from the narrative and lowers the mastery of the storyline, especially when the reader has to decipher what you probably… most likely… maybe meant to write. Yet and still, I’m rooting for you! 🙌🏽🙌🏼🙌
- BDean210mthCommented
How would the Alphas feel if they could get pregnant and Talia used them as baby-making machines? I can just imagine them being total drama queens! 😂😂🤣🤣😂😂
"Word of caution, Alpha Talia. You are a unique existence, but even without knowing what the Sphere of Power actually showed, other Alphas got the idea that you are powerful. A mature female Alpha who recently came of age is a rare existence these days. Many would go to great lengths to secure strong offspring… if you know what I'm trying to say." - BDean210mthCommented"I am not many people, Julian. I am Talia Moonrider, the Alpha of the Midnight Guardians pack. If anyone tries to force me into anything or to touch a hair of my people, they can forget about me being on friendly terms with them. Is that clear?"
- BDean210mthCommented
That sound about right! 😂🤣
Damon nodded earnestly. "I can see it happening. You accidentally escaped your personal guards and found yourself in the Lightclaw pack right when Axel was there for sightseeing with Meg." - BDean210mthCommented
Poor Max and his potty mouth! 😂😂
Damon nodded in agreement with Talia's words. "When you remove the curses and insults, what's left is useful to work with." - BDean210mthCommented
Mad is like: “Who, me?” 😂🤣
Maddox was obviously shocked by this. Did she just volunteer him for a job? "What?" - BDean210mthCommented
Listen who’s talking! 😂😂 He’d pounce on her right there if he could! My boy, Damon, is always jelly! 🤣🤣
"Alpha Talia is an Alpha.", Damon grumbled while wiping her hand vigorously. "Treat her as an equal, and not as a maiden that should be courted." - BDean210mthCommentedAlpha Edward knew it was beyond that. Those five were trying to appear good in Talia's eyes after they submitted to her. This was one more thing Alpha Edward didn't understand, why did they submit? When Talia turned to him, he could feel her confidence and arrogance, but there was no pressure whatsoever. Does that mean they submitted willingly?
- BDean210mthCommented
It’s a mystery, right? 😂😂
Maddox couldn't wrap his head around it. "How is that possible?" - BDean210mthCommented
That’s what happens when you are willing to be a pawn in someone else’s game! Stupid Alpha Richard! 😏
Alpha Richard's steps paused, and he contemplated going back to the conference room and sharing this with Alpha Edward. Surely, they can take advantage of this information but… then he remembered how Alpha Edward left him to burn there on his own, without clarifying who summoned the Council of the Alphas or what the real agenda was. If Alpha Edward didn't make him go to talk to Talia, he wouldn't lose his money or his face. Because of Alpha Edward, he ended up looking like an idiot! Well, two can play that game. - BDean210mthCommented
BOY STOP 🛑! Or should I say, “BOY BYE!”…? Better stick to trashy Nora, if she ever gets out of the dungeon! 🤣
A brilliant thought popped into Alpha Edward's mind: wouldn't it be nice if he can coax Talia to come to his side? They would be unstoppable! He conquered many women, he liked them young, and this one looked just about right. - BDean210mthCommented
All the Alphas are feeling the burn of Talia’s GIRL POWER! 😂😂
Talia was right there, like the most important person in the room, leaving Alpha Edward in awe. - BDean210mthCommented
GIRL POWER! 🤗
Talia stifled a laugh. "Speak properly to my elders? Aren't we all equal here? When I arrived, I heard a theory about how my parents gave me their position as the Alpha, or that maybe I am Axel's mate. But none of you thought that I took my position in a show of power by defeating previous Alphas." Talia lifted her chin smugly. "You want me to respect you? Make me. But be prepared to bear the consequences if you fail." - BDean210mthCommentedCh 561 The Council of Alphas (11)
- BDean21yrCommented
Girl, you’re outta line! 😤
Gu Nianjia had to do something. She immediately walked over to the young girls. "What are you talking about? Of course, my brother would not sleep with Lin Yiqian. He did not even sleep at home on the night they got married. He has plenty of other women." - BDean21yrCommented
Speak up about it, dude! Don’t just stand there looking nonplussed! 😂😂
Those chocolates were gifts from his girlfriend from overseas. She had lined up for hours to buy them for him. Gu Nianshen should have at least left one box or even a single piece of chocolate for him. - BDean21yrCommented
Dude, let it go! 😂🤣
When Li Nanmu saw that Lin Yiqian had walked far away, he spoke softly with a frown, "This was the exact same way she had rejected me back then. Right after, she walked away while stepping over the heart-shaped rose petals I have arranged on the floor." - BDean21yrCommented
Author, you’re killing me here! 😂🤣
The young boy figured that his father probably died because his genitals were weak. - BDean21yrCommented
Yep, useless with only 3 seconds of stamina! 😂😂😂
Gu Nianshen replied in English, "That's because your father's big genitals are useless."