Rebecca's stomach lurched as she stared at the damnable item in William's hand. In her eyes, it was the most ominous thing in the world, and no one, alive or dead, would want to be on the receiving end of that dastardly weapon, which would give someone a trauma that would last for the rest of their lives.
your chapter dont seem to flow together like there completely different stories. makes seem like you skipped a chapter in between. the grammar leaves something to be desired. the story sounds like it could be really good. keep up the work thanks
The Imbecile Lord Is Married to Five Beautiful Goddess
The time he spent playing Mobage was less than 3 days. Thus, his experience was really limited in this. Nonetheless, this thing had picked ray's curiosity. He pondered for a bit before, at the end, choosing yes.
Farming Inside The Dungeon (The legend of farm-style dungeon)