Bhavini_74
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Bhavini_743yrCommentedEve is on the nerve. She is irritating me with an over smart attitude. UR writing is awesome :) Loving it.
"Patience, my friend. I told you before, you will know that soon," Why is this girl so forgetful was the only thought on Eve's mind, "Anyway, the problem is not your heartbreak but the person who broke it,"- Bhavini_743yrCommented
I still not sure if Layla is a negative or positive character. I am enjoying your writing. The emotions are effective, but the way Clara let Eve play her didn't make sense to me. How could she trusted an unknown person to this extent, and how she entered Clara's private room.
Layla was still confused and lost, her vision blurred. Her phone vibrated, and the name which calmed her mind appeared. - Bhavini_743yrCommented
Who is she ????
Her midnight black hair was dangling down her waist, where she wore a Mignonette color long outerwear cape, enhancing her beauty. Her style was simple but elegant. The girl seemed so young that Clara was unclear about her age. - Bhavini_743yrCommented
So far, the story is tangled... I am getting to know the characters. It seems like Clara is a tough cookie
She has made her decision. - Bhavini_743yrCommented
I am enjoying your writing style; the way you have poured pain through various ways is effective.
Without thinking much, she poured all the remaining content into her mouth. She did not hate the taste of it, but it left an unpleasant burning feeling in her throat. - Bhavini_743yrCommented
Alexander feel like historical name. I prefer Alex.
Times have certainly changed. Alexander walked towards the other with unknown feelings in his heart. - Bhavini_743yrCommented
interesting plot
Heartbreak was not a big deal, but getting heartbroken by your most trusted companions was more suffocating. - Bhavini_743yrCommented
interesting start. Loved the lines
In the depth of night, three shadows were facing each other. Each of them had different emotions in their eyes.