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I don’t make it this far in a lot of books. The last few days you didn’t post had me spiraling. Glad to see you’re doing good 😌
The ferryman of the dead is Charon not Thanatos. Thanatos is just straight god of death
If you like a good op main character, this is a good one. As long as the author can keep escalating the danger of the game to keep it interesting, you’ve got my support [img=recommend]
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See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule
Mc’s personality is great right now. He’s come far from, and has several potential directions you could take him. I think the irrational rage, when dealing with demons and cultists, is a fun plot point. Easy to exploit for an expectation subversion. Like; oh this will be an easy to resolve problem, then boom, someone’s dead that shouldn’t be. Now he has to maneuver his way out of the situation alive. I don’t know if I dig how dishonest and unhelpful the system is sometimes. I’m sure that’s some character development you already have in the works though. Last thought is how his power progression is coming along. It seems like he’s slowed down a lot because of the school. It feels like we need more small time skips. Or he need to place a binder on someone more powerful for more substantial feedback. Or or all of his current binders need to undergo a tribulation that will lead to major feedback. He doesn’t need to jump straight to his masters level, but at least to far threshold of SSS. I don’t know what you already have planed, so take all of my comments as hopes and not as demands.
On further reading, you should probably put this one back in the oven. I’m seeing grammatical errors, and logical hiccups, all over the place
Your sentence here is running on an kind of confusing. Something like “… 10 preloaded spells that could each be used once.” You could then start a new sentence. The previous paragraph also has some odd wording that you may want to review. I hope you don’t take this the wrong way. I only want to see you succeed.